A recent survey of 250 adults between the ages of 30 and 45 showed an association between the number of hours adults spend online each day and self-reporting of symptoms commonly associated with depression. The survey found that adults who spend 30 hours

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A recent survey of 250 adults between the ages of 30 and 45 showed an association between the number of hours adults spend online each day and self-reporting of symptoms commonly associated with depression. The survey found that adults who spend 30 hours or more online each week were twice as likely as others to report that they “frequently” had trouble concentrating. Of adults who reported spending more than 30 hours per week online, 20 percent also reported that they had felt “sad, down, or blue” at least three times within the past month.These results suggest that spending too much time online is linked to depression and people who want to improve their well-being should strictly limit the time they spend online.Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

It is stated in the argument that people who wanted to enhance their health should limit the time they spend online. They have concluded this based on the survey conducted for 250 adults on basis of reportings on the timings they spend online and the one's who reported they are suffering from depression. However, before this recommendation is evaluated three questions must be answered.

First of all, Do the effect is same for the adults as well as youngsters?In other words does all the people feel similarly? Adults and Youngsters may feel differently while using gadgets-perhaps as the age matters adults can feel more effected even with similar changes and youngsters as they are more active and energetic can feel differently. But the survey is taken only for adults. If the above scenario has merit then the conclusion drawn in the original argument, is significantly weakened.

Secondly, Do the adults come from different places for survey? Or is it conducted among small region? The argument does not provide any evidence or do not mention anything about the location. If the people are from same location there might be other factors as well for the depression like climatic conditions, sounds and pollution around etc. The argument prematurely assumes that it is same for all the localities.

Thirdly, Do all the people who spend more than 30 hours online suffer with depression? There are people who do not suffer with concentration problems irrespective of spending more than 30 hours online. Even there are people who are suffering from depression from the category who spend less time online. So this is vaguely represented. As the survey is conducted for just 250 adults the high number who fall under depression as well as spending time online can merely be coincident.

In conclusion, this argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to several unwarranted assumptions. If the above three questions were answered and offers more evidence will be possible to evaluate its viability of recommending to limit the time people spend online.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, while, in conclusion, as well as, first of all, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 55.5748502994 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1723.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 339.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08259587021 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77774941032 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504424778761 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.2526979449 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.6842105263 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8421052632 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05263157895 5.70786347227 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 5.15768463074 19% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229255922563 0.218282227539 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699078583868 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.078154577157 0.0701772020484 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229255922563 0.128457276422 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0628817314937 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 340 350
No. of Characters: 1696 1500
No. of Different Words: 170 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.294 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.988 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.66 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 122 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.889 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.177 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.322 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.55 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.084 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5