A recent survey of 250 adults between the ages of 30 and 45 showed an association between the number of hours adults spend online each day and self-reporting of symptoms commonly associated with depression. The survey found that adults who spend 30 hours or more online each week were twice as likely as others to report that they "frequently" had trouble concentrating. Of adults who reported spending more than 30 hours per week online, 20% also reported that they had felt "sad, down, or blue" at least three times within the past month.
These results suggest that spending too much time online is linked with depression, and people who want to improve their well-being should strictly limit the time they spend online.
Depression is consuming the whole world like a plague. There are many causes of this mental disease. Too much stress is one of them. And several cases has been reported linking the disease with the time spent over internet as in the given statement. On the basis of a survey conducted within only 250 people of particular age group a profound claim has been maid that to improve the well being, one should cut off the online hours. The claim is bizarre just by the tone of it. Without proper study and backing with some real tough evidences and based on too much incomplete premises and wrong considerations or fallacies, the claim had been made.
On the first glance the claim seems valid but when looked upon with careful eyes numerous fallacies are seen. The first being the survey, Survey is a very board term, the results vary and depend on too many variable which cannot be accounted all the times. The sample size is a important factor in any survey. In any case , 250 is a very low sample size let alone on this very delicate topic. Again we do not know any cases of the history of the test samples. Their past medical history should be carefully looked upon before they can be tested. What if they are already suffering from depression or any other mental disease. So, to make the board claim valid, the proper examination of the medicals report of the past is a prerequisite.
Again, other fallacy is considering the symptoms such as sadness and difficult in concentrating as clear cut depression. There is no evidence stating their family background, or what they do before going online, is there any other problem hunting them such as family crisis or economic breakdown. Such cases has a similar effect on human mind and cause sadness and other associated problem which may look similar to depression but are not. To be sure that all these symptoms are clearly and only related with depression and online usage the other factors such as family status, economic and social status must be examined.
Moving ahead, the claim is more of a generalized one. The results are enforced upon all age groups while the test was done upon a particular age group of 30-45. Due to the differences in age and attitude the results on older group may be totally opposite to the younger groups. At the age of 30-45 not only the 30 hour or more internet usage but any other thing can give you mental stress resulting upon depression. At this age people tend to take everything seriously and the brain may not be able to take the toile and may give away. But in young ages not only 30 but even 50 hours of internet per week may not have any effect on them. Even the positive results may arise and in such cases the claim is totally pompous or circumspect. For the claim to have more weight, people from all age groups must be included and if the results are similar among all age groups, the internet and 30 hour internet usage may be declared culprit.
In conclusion, it is likely to think that more internet weekly may be the cause of depression. However, the claim cannot be justified with the given premises. The sample size is too small, they must be broadened, people from all age group must be included. For the assumption that if one result worked out for one age group, it will be valid for all is not correct. so, even the results leads to assuming that less online hours definitely improve the health cannot be hold true for all the cases due to lack of evidences.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'so', 'well', 'while', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'in any case']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.227138643068 0.25644967241 89% => OK
Verbs: 0.154867256637 0.15541462614 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.120943952802 0.0836205057962 145% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0575221238938 0.0520304965353 111% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0206489675516 0.0272364105082 76% => OK
Prepositions: 0.107669616519 0.125424944231 86% => OK
Participles: 0.0545722713864 0.0416121511921 131% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.33368551865 2.79052419416 84% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0176991150442 0.026700313972 66% => OK
Particles: 0.00442477876106 0.001811407834 244% => OK
Determiners: 0.11209439528 0.113004496875 99% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0294985250737 0.0255425247493 115% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00737463126844 0.0127820249294 58% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3480.0 2731.13054187 127% => OK
No of words: 624.0 446.07635468 140% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57692307692 6.12365571057 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.99799879888 4.57801047555 109% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.288461538462 0.378187486979 76% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.192307692308 0.287650121315 67% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.120192307692 0.208842608468 58% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0705128205128 0.135150697306 52% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33368551865 2.79052419416 84% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 207.018472906 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.447115384615 0.469332199767 95% => OK
Word variations: 54.6172366348 52.1807786196 105% => OK
How many sentences: 32.0 20.039408867 160% => OK
Sentence length: 19.5 23.2022227129 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1494266667 57.7814097925 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.75 141.986410481 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 23.2022227129 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.375 0.724660767414 52% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 3.58251231527 223% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 38.7307692308 51.9672348444 75% => OK
Elegance: 1.67088607595 1.8405768891 91% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331542508269 0.441005458295 75% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.108648002942 0.135418324435 80% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0708594538427 0.0829849096947 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.479604392949 0.58762219726 82% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.138333141746 0.147661913831 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123549775667 0.193483328276 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699863922647 0.0970749176394 72% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.371743251201 0.42659136922 87% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.127349183061 0.0774707102158 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230392364993 0.312017818177 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0687158068543 0.0698173142475 98% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.33743842365 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.87684729064 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.82512315271 249% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 3.0 6.46551724138 46% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 5.36822660099 130% => OK
Neutral topic words: 7.0 2.82389162562 248% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 14.657635468 116% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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