Recently butter has been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States This change however has had little impact on our customers In fact only about 2 percent of customers have complained indicating tha

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"Recently, butter has been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States. This change, however, has had little impact on our customers. In fact, only about 2 percent of customers have complained, indicating that an average of 98 people out of 100 are happy with the change. Furthermore, many servers have reported that a number of customers who ask for butter do not complain when they are given margarine instead. Clearly, either these customers do not distinguish butter from margarine or they use the term 'butter' to refer to either butter or margarine."

The author concludes that either the customers do not distinguish butter from margarine or they use the term "butter" to refer to either butter or margarine". In order to support his conclusion, he has cited various pieces of evidence. Although these pieces of evidence appear to bolster the argument, a meticulous analysis will show otherwise. Hence, in order to make the argument more sound, an author need to address the following specific evidence.
First and foremost, the author is presenting that only two percent of customers have complained. Perhaps, this might not be the case, for example, when I go to the restaurant, even if I find the restaurant not good at food and quality, I simply don't complain. Whatever, at last, I say thank you for your wonderful service and food. This may be the case, the data that shows only two percent of people have complained may not ensure that only two percent of the customers were unhappy. Perhaps, there was more than fifty percent of unhappy people but they simply didn't express it. If the case is this, then the conclusion formulated based on this evidence might go unwarranted.

Second of all, the author is using the words many servers, how much this means? It is quite vague. Many simply mean more than two, the author has not provided the statistics required. There might be almost all servers have reported or just three of them have reported, these both case might be there. Perhaps there were hundreds of servers and just three out of them have reported that several customers who ask for butter do not complain when they are given margarine instead. In this case, the author's conclusion base on the evidence doesn't hold water.
Third of all, the author has not presented the statistical data of the number of customers visited after and before the change. Perhaps, the number of customers is decreasing knowing the use of margarine, perhaps they knew it and quit their habit to-go restaurant. If this is the case, then the author's conclusion might not be logical.
In sum, if the author has presented specific evidences such as statistical data of the servers the number of customers before and after the change, this argument might be more persuasive. The conclusion made by the author based on his pieces of evidence, I find this argument is not persuasive.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, may, second, so, then, third, for example, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1945.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 396.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91161616162 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64474243253 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477272727273 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.3659625434 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.619047619 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8571428571 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47619047619 5.70786347227 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163416395117 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0502215622887 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529416194616 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0945261861507 0.128457276422 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410459299565 0.0628817314937 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.3799401198 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 11 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 399 350
No. of Characters: 1871 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.469 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.689 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.417 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 126 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.983 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.476 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.319 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.384 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.117 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5