"Recently, there have been discussions about ending Grove College's century-old tradition of all-female education by admitting male students into our programs. At a recent faculty meeting, a majority of faculty members voted in favor of co-education, arguing that it would encourage more students to apply to Grove. However, Grove students, both past and present, are against the idea of coeducation. Eighty percent of the students responding to a survey conducted by the student government wanted the school to remain all female, and over half of the alumnae who answered a separate survey also opposed coeducation. Therefore, we recommend maintaining Grove College's tradition of all-female education. We predict that keeping the college all-female will improve morale among students and convince alumnae to keep supporting the college financially."
While it may be true that, the tradition of admitting all females on the Grove college is the most accepted fact but, this author's assertion about the statistical datas is rife with holes and illicit claims. This type of claims doesn't make a cogent case for the readers to believe that Coeducation is opposed by the students.
Firstly, let's take an example that the survey conducted by the student government was done in a vacation time. In such case, students were only on their hostels. Many hostel students believe that if the incoming students are greater than they wouldn't have the best facilities that now they are having. Such a condition will certainly favour for the opposition of Coeducation. Everyone have a desire of having the best faclitities like good food, silent environment so that they will be living like they are in their own home. This also foster thier academic aspects. If the students are low, then faculty to student ratio will also be lower. That will help them to communicate with their professors with ease. They might also have a benefit of getting good job inside the college. So, this case might have made the students living at hostel to oppose the Coeduction. Instead, this datas doesn't resemble the whole students that are studying in the campus.
Secondly, When we look at the alumae that opposed the Coeducation systed, they were only half. The other half may have favoured this system. Those alumnae who opposed this system are those which are not getting enough funding from the campus. So, they might think that with the addition of new members in a college, they might face difficulty in doing their own researchs. So, to foster the coeducation, Grove college should fund for the research activities and other recreational aspects. With the other half, who didn't demand for the seperate survery are getting such facilities and they might be in favour of Coeducation system.
To sum up, these types of factors should be considered while making the final decision. So, the Grove college lack credible source of findings that ultimately turn down what is expected among the students and almunae.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Everyone have a desire of having the best faclitities like good food, silent environment so that they will be living like they are in their own home.
Error: faclitities Suggestion: facilities
Sentence: This also foster thier academic aspects.
Error: thier Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Secondly, When we look at the alumae that opposed the Coeducation systed, they were only half.
Error: alumae Suggestion: alumnae
Error: systed Suggestion: system
Sentence: With the other half, who didn't demand for the seperate survery are getting such facilities and they might be in favour of Coeducation system.
Error: survery Suggestion: survey
Error: seperate Suggestion: separate
Error: favour Suggestion: favor
Error: didn Suggestion: did
Sentence: So, the Grove college lack credible source of findings that ultimately turn down what is expected among the students and almunae.
Error: almunae Suggestion: alumnae
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 364 350
No. of Characters: 1735 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.368 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.766 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.362 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 117 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 52 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.999 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.277 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.448 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.062 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 229, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...and illicit claims. This type of claims doesnt make a cogent case for the readers to b...
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Line 3, column 244, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...incoming students are greater than they wouldnt have the best facilities that now they ...
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Line 3, column 386, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...the opposition of Coeducation. Everyone have a desire of having the best faclitities...
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Line 3, column 888, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ose the Coeduction. Instead, this datas doesnt resemble the whole students that are st...
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Line 5, column 516, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ional aspects. With the other half, who didnt demand for the seperate survery are get...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, while, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1783.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 360.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95277777778 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40061559749 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536111111111 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 4.96107784431 242% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.3356969196 57.8364921388 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.9047619048 119.503703932 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1428571429 23.324526521 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09523809524 5.70786347227 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116475109647 0.218282227539 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0352238987653 0.0743258471296 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0374885885191 0.0701772020484 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0723076763308 0.128457276422 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278925478434 0.0628817314937 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.3799401198 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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