some young adults want independence from their parents where some want to live with their families
The view on "some young adults want independence from their parents where some want to live with their families" differ from person to person according to their experiences. However, in my case, I would like to have my family members around me.
First, Young adults are the ones who are mentally and physically developing. During this period, they are trying to grasp the job opportunities, some are doing interns etc,. For example: when I was in Bachelor's final year we all have to do and submit our final year projects. Those days are very hectic and I was in rush every time. Actually, I did not try to think about what's going outside this world nor I cared about my own health. At that time, my mother was there for me. She frequently gave me water, juices, healthy foods and vegetables. On the other hand, my friend was also working alongside me. He did not have his parents at that time. When the project deadline was near, we were more reckless on our diets as we hardly have time to drink a glass of water. But at home, I had my mother taking care of my diet but he did not have his elders. Before the final day of defense, I heard from his neighbor that he is admitted in the hospital because of weakness. So, parents indeed are the gifts who not only take care of you but also gives motivation in order to complete any task and are the most important part of our family.
Second, Most of the adults like to be independent because they have no idea how worthy a family tends to be on the big occasions like Christmas of US or Dashain of Nepal. Last year, my grandparents were in US, they went there to visit my sister. When dashain festival was getting nearer, I felt that i was missing them. As that festival lasts for ten days, I could literally feel their importance in my life, actually our's life. First time I haven't had tika from my grandparents. Actually, the air was not that of the previous year. Later, I skyped them and talked about the environment around there. So, every individual wants to have their parents around there when such big occasions are happening. Family brings joy which is needed in everybody's life, mostly adult age is the one which is seeking to have fun all the time.
In sum, parents need to guide their adults during their life time. Adult life sometimes perceive independence is important but the important thing is that parents help in decision making and ignites the world around you during special occasions and events. Infact, parents are the only treasure that remains in our life permanently.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, second, so, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2107.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59041394336 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41063969368 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522875816993 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.53207893 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.037037037 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.07407407407 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270755040697 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633577505013 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131110578409 0.0737576698707 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230223235496 0.150856017488 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.199380423095 0.0645574589148 309% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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