People who make decisions based on emotion and justify those decisions with logic afterwards are poor decision makers.
According to author's assertion, those who make decision by taking emotions on account are the poor decision makers. In so far, i agree with this statement. When person at the authoritative level makes such decision than the company to which he is acclimatized will surely lack the coherent planning and hence decisions. On the other way, some follow their instincts and still they are said to be one of the finest person in decision making. Such instincts are the result of somehow emotional attachment to the work.
Firstly, Let's take an example of Henry ford political controversy. At that time, industries were modernizing and many popular models of cars like "Tin Lizzie" were introduced. Despite these success, he was touched by the First world war. He then ran unsuccessfully for the senate. Later he also published anti-Semitic writings on the local newspaper of Dearborn calling it an The international jew. Also later in 1938 he accepted the grand cross of German eagle, the nazi regime's prominent medal for the foreigner. Despite all the success in the manufacturing of popular cars, he made a decisions that was not according to his caliber and was not thought properly by him. This led him to have one of the great controversy at that time. So, job done without thinking and acting emotionally on any field will cause serious harm to that person.
However, let's take another paragon from Alice in Wonderland. In that novel, Alice seems to have full of curiosity. Infact, when she saw white rabbit galloping in the field, she began to follow it. She was drawn by her instincts and later she made her way to the wonderland. If she hadn't followed the rabbit, she wouldn't have been in the most dazzling and charming place. Her instincts and emotions showed her way to the wonderland. Her story tell us that, thinking more is great but sometimes you have to follow your emotional part of viewing the world inorder to get the most fanciful experience in life and that will be invaluable than anything.
To sum up, we need to see various factors in order to fully agree or disgaree with the author's assertion. Like in the case of Henry ford, when it comes to the name and fame and what we shall contribute to this world through our creation,than we must be careful about what we do and have to think rationally through our proper plans. While in achieving the life's pleasure like Alice did, thinking logically won't make an aesthetic achievement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, so, still, then, while, as to, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2048.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 422.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85308056872 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65247076835 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582938388626 0.4932671777 118% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.242443277 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.3333333333 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5833333333 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.625 5.21951772744 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169424229554 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0456150189491 0.0831039109588 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104547360074 0.0758088955206 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112565154467 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.139918258423 0.0667264976115 210% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.1392134831 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.