To reverse a decline in listener numbers our owners have decided that WWAC must change from its current rock music format The decline has occurred despite population growth in our listening area but that growth has resulted mainly from people moving here

Essay topics:

"To reverse a decline in listener numbers, our owners have decided that WWAC must change from its current rock-music format. The decline has occurred despite population growth in our listening area, but that growth has resulted mainly from people moving here after their retirement. We must make listeners of these new residents. We could switch to a music format tailored to their tastes, but a continuing decline in local sales of recorded music suggests limited interest in music. Instead we should change to a news and talk format, a form of radio that is increasingly popular in our area."

There are some different opinions with the statement. There are too many unreasonable explanations.
First of all, this essay claims that the listener numbers are declining so the owner has decided that WWAC must change from its current rock-music format. It is suspicious. It might be because other programs make its listener numbers decline. Other programs look like rock music and it might make it decline.
Secondly, the essay claims that the decline has occurred despite population growth in our listening area, we should get proof that listeners are always listening to the WWAC radio station. If they do not listen to this radio and don't know how to change policy, they will fail.
Thirdly, the statement claims that a continuing decline in local sales of recorded music suggests limited interest in music. In fact, the decline in local sales is also they have other ways to purchase new music. They might buy music on the Internet or it is cheaper in online stores. It is also affected by the country's economic crisis, even the global economic crisis. It decreases the ability to purchase and the residents give up these needs.
Fourth, this essay claims that they should change to a news and talk format, a form of radio that is increasingly popular in our area. How do you get this answer? Will it take some surveys? People might not want to change the original programs and if this radio station changes the programs will make the residents give up this station and look for other stations. So we need more evidence to prove they want to listen to music more.
Finally, the manager of WWAC radio station needs to prove that the rock-music format lost some listeners the number is more than the number of new listeners.
To sum up, we need more evidence to make decisions.

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Average: 5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 229, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...If they do not listen to this radio and dont know how to change policy, they will fa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, in fact, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1481.0 2260.96107784 66% => OK
No of words: 308.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80844155844 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36082276881 2.78398813304 85% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496753246753 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 705.55239521 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.3622072035 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.05 119.503703932 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4 23.324526521 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322643310775 0.218282227539 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0810844919374 0.0743258471296 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11464456164 0.0701772020484 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137155555512 0.128457276422 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117877881456 0.0628817314937 187% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 14.3799401198 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.3550499002 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.197005988 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 98.500998004 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 12.3882235529 44% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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