"To reverse a decline in listener numbers, our owners have decided that WWAC must change from its current rock-music format. The decline has occurred despite population growth in our listening area , but that growth has resulted mainly from people moving here after their retirement. We must make listeners of these new residents. We could switch to a music format tailored to their tastes, but a continuing decline in local sales of recorded music suggests limited interest in music. Instead we should change to a news and talk format, a form of radio that is increasingly popular in our area."
The primary issue with the author's reasoning lies in his unsubstantiated premises. Here the author claims that maybe rock music is now not that much popular among people, however, it may be their station only who are not proving the good quality of music and thus people are now shifting to other electronic gadgets like iPods so that they can listen to their favorite music anytime anywhere, and the author claims that they should now switch to news and talk format but if there are already set up stations for that then the remaining audience which is left with them, maybe they would also leave, because suddenly shifting to different format will not be beneficial at all.
Also, the author makes several assumptions that remain unproven, first of all, no mention of the survey details are mentioned anywhere in the argument, what if to the person whom they asked about what genre they listen is very few people and they hastily come to the conclusion that there is a very limited taste among people regarding music, or what if the news and talk format are also popular among an only certain amount of people and hence shifting themselves also from music to news format wouldn't have any use because there is no information regarding what people are listening to news and talk format popularity among people.
While the author does have several key issues in his argument's premises and assumptions, that is not to say that the entire argument is without base, he could mention the proper statistics of people and the whole population of the city should be taken into amount and surveys regarding what genre they listen to or at what time most of the people are free when they could turn the radio on would definitely help them to get a bigger picture, and they should also ask what age groups are into news format or at what time they listen to this.
In sum, the author's illogical argument is based on unsupported premises and unsubstantiated assumptions that render his conclusion invalid. .If the author articulated the points that are mentioned in the above paragraph then maybe it could be a strong argument but as of now, it will hardly convenience anyone because of the lack of proofs and unsubstantiated premises.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 385 350
No. of Characters: 1818 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.43 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.722 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.428 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 48.125 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 34.937 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.458 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.706 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.206 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...format will not be beneficial at all Also the author makes several assumptions th...
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Line 4, column 492, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...emselves also from music to news format wouldnt have any use because there is no inform...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, regarding, so, then, thus, while, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1831.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 384.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76822916667 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41430689162 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.458333333333 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 19.7664670659 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 384.0 22.8473053892 1681% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 57.8364921388 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1831.0 119.503703932 1532% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 384.0 23.324526521 1646% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 89.0 5.70786347227 1559% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.20758483034 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11608693228 0.218282227539 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11608693228 0.0743258471296 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0701772020484 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0700778106898 0.128457276422 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044801203922 0.0628817314937 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 193.0 14.3799401198 1342% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -309.82 48.3550499002 -641% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.1628742515 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 151.9 12.197005988 1245% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.87 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 24.86 8.32208582834 299% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 53.0 98.500998004 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 53.0 12.3882235529 428% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 155.6 11.1389221557 1397% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 156.0 11.9071856287 1310% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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