The study suggests that the increased use of salicylates will result in gradually lowering amount of headaches in Mentia. The study has come to this conclusion based on the chemical family of Salicylates and a rise in the commercial use of this chemical as a preservative. However, before this study may actually prove to be true, but it suffers from flaws in reasoning that severely undermines its credibility. Thus, the argument should provide three pieces of evidences.
First, evidence regarding Salicylates actually having the same effects on headaches as aspirin. It is possible that even though they are from the same chemical family Salicylates does not alleviate headaches but instead exacerbate them. It is also possible that Salicylates have little to trivial effects towards a headache. If either of these cases have merit, then the conclusion drawn from the original argument is significantly weakened.
Second, evidence regarding the amount of Salicylates used as food preservatives. The argument prematurely assumes that sufficient amount of Salicylates is used in the preservatives which would mitigate headaches - perhaps Salicylates are used in trace amount while making the preservatives. It is also possible that, Salicylates when made into compounds by mixing it with different chemicals will lose its efficacy as a chemical that assuages headaches. If the above is true, the conclusion does not hold water.
Third, evidence concerning the practical usage of salicylates as flavoring agents. Maybe, the flavoring agents made using salicylates are not as palatable as the ones using other chemicals. This might actually cause a decrease in revenue and prevent companies from using it as flavoring agents. It also could be expensive to make flavoring agents using salicylates preventing the food processing companies from looking it as a viable option to make the flavoring agents. It is also possible that an excessive amount of salicylates may have deleterious effects towards one health. It is already found by the study that the foods in general are inherently high in this chemical and more consumption be detrimental. Thus, before proper evaluation of the argument, this evidence must be gathered.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the study is able to provide the above states evidences, then it will be possible to fully evaluate the correlation between the decrease in headaches with increased passage of time.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 396 350
No. of Characters: 2096 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.461 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.293 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.925 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 160 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 128 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 106 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 70 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.498 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.317 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.525 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.108 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 581, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...deleterious effects towards one health. It is already found by the study that the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, look, may, regarding, second, so, then, third, thus, while, in conclusion, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2151.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 396.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43181818182 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00244493003 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474747474747 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 715.5 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.764328412 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.428571429 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8571428571 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.70786347227 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267076411921 0.218282227539 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.083295428926 0.0743258471296 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0630790507292 0.0701772020484 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143674582309 0.128457276422 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0729121914023 0.0628817314937 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 48.3550499002 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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