The author claims that Buckingham college should build new attractive dormitories as it would attract more prospective students. Further, the author provides few evidences regarding enrollement trends in the college and prises of the apartments outside the college to be very high. The evidences might be looking convincing at first glance. However, further analysis is required to accept the argument as legit.
Firstly, the author claims that Buckingham's enrollement trend is growing and might become double over the next 50 years and the exisiting dormitory space would be insufficient. Even though the enrollement of students might double in the next 50 years, this does not concludes that all those students are looking for Buckingham's dormitory. There might be chances of students staying in relatives house. Thus, the author must provide evidences stating whether the enrolled students are looking for Buckingham's dormitory.
Secondly, the author states that average rent of apartment in the town has risen. Accordinglly, the student would face difficulty to afford those apartments. Nevertheless, author fails to provide evidences reagarding financial status of the students. There are chances that majority of students would be rich enough to afford housing. The author must bolster the claim by providing statastical data figures of students with respective financial status.
Finally, the author simply concludes that attractive dormitories would result in more enrollement of prospective students. In contrast, students would have enrolled based on educational facilities provided by the college. The author has to state evidences in the form of data figures regarding number of students enrolling beacause of dormitories.
To sum up, the author must provide the above stated evidences regarding the stated claim in order to cohesively tag the argument to be credible.
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Further, the author provides few evidences regarding enrollement trends in the college and prises of the apartments outside the college to be very high.
Error: prises Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: enrollement Suggestion: enrollment
Sentence: However, further analysis is required to accept the argument as legit.
Error: legit Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Firstly, the author claims that Buckingham's enrollement trend is growing and might become double over the next 50 years and the exisiting dormitory space would be insufficient.
Error: exisiting Suggestion: existing
Error: enrollement Suggestion: enrollment
Sentence: Even though the enrollement of students might double in the next 50 years, this does not concludes that all those students are looking for Buckingham's dormitory.
Error: enrollement Suggestion: enrollment
Sentence: Nevertheless, author fails to provide evidences reagarding financial status of the students.
Error: reagarding Suggestion: regarding
Sentence: The author must bolster the claim by providing statastical data figures of students with respective financial status.
Error: statastical Suggestion: statistical
Sentence: Finally, the author simply concludes that attractive dormitories would result in more enrollement of prospective students.
Error: enrollement Suggestion: enrollment
Sentence: The author has to state evidences in the form of data figures regarding number of students enrolling beacause of dormitories.
Error: beacause Suggestion: because
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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flaws:
No. of Words: 283 350 //more content wanted
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 283 350
No. of Characters: 1569 1500
No. of Different Words: 141 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.102 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.544 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.788 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 134 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.647 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.708 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.372 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.583 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 267, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'conclude'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: conclude
...ble in the next 50 years, this does not concludes that all those students are looking for...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 267, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'conclude'
Suggestion: conclude
...ble in the next 50 years, this does not concludes that all those students are looking for...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 327, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to house'.
Suggestion: to house
...students would be rich enough to afford housing. The author must bolster the claim by p...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, look, nevertheless, regarding, second, secondly, thus, as to, in contrast, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 28.8173652695 35% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1610.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 283.0 441.139720559 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.6890459364 5.12650576532 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84696907752 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 204.123752495 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512367491166 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.7428516956 57.8364921388 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.7058823529 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6470588235 23.324526521 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.17647058824 5.70786347227 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175400493464 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.060877733314 0.0743258471296 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0759352748491 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0977061196434 0.128457276422 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0826760779842 0.0628817314937 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.43 12.5979740519 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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