The author argues that to serve the housing needs of students of Buckingham college, new dormitories are required and they can also increase the chances of prospective student enrolling in Buckingham college. This seems to be driven out of haste and the evidence provided prior to the statement made does not support the conclusion clearly.
In the first statement made by the author about housing needs, there is no mention about what types of issues are faced by students who are already enrolled. One of the problems can be, if the number of students who are sharing one room is greater than nominal count, the director and the concerened authorities can check if there are rooms which are vacant or booked by students but not used. Else they can also survey vacant spaces within the existing dormitories where new rooms can be built to acommodate the current population. To strenghten the claim, the author must provide details about the viability of adding new rooms in the existing buildings.
The author also mentions that the current planning is done to cater the needs of students 50 years down the line too. Such a long sighted planning can be costly and may require financial support which the college may not guarantee. The author also mentions about the rising average rent of apartments in the same town and claims that the off-campus housing cannot be afforded in the future. But if the college does not have the financial ability to back such audacious plans, the cost of the construction may be levied from the same students whom they wish to support. To support the claim there must be evidence that can compare the expected cost of off-campus housing with the expected price of dormitories.
The argument is also concerned about attracting more students to enroll in the subsequent years using the allure of these fashionable dormitories. But the argument already mentioned that the enrollment is growing and these measures are being taken to support the rising demands. If the college expects a larger rise in enrollment compared to recent trends, it must rather look into other academic issues which could be plaguing its reputation and fashionable dormitory cannot be the solution.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 368 350
No. of Characters: 1812 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.38 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.924 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.497 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.286 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.573 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.356 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.567 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.068 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1845.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 368.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01358695652 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54890580095 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491847826087 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.8669007017 57.8364921388 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.785714286 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2857142857 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 5.70786347227 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139422807938 0.218282227539 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0529058439251 0.0743258471296 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490492072792 0.0701772020484 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0949999853379 0.128457276422 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.035572012142 0.0628817314937 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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