It is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as a hero.

The choice of heroes depict the highest virtues which the society aspires for it's citizens and in the fast pacing world, where there are is a growing population of influential people and extensive media scrutiny, it may be hard for someone to remain a hero for a long period of time but not they way in which the author mentions.

A child aspiring to be an astronaut would love to imagine himself on par with Neil Armstrong or Yuri Gagarin. But in order to relate with the present, he may like to consider the current generation of astronauts or space entreprenuers such as Elon Musk as heroes. Does this mean that the child would denounce his admiration to his hero if he comes to know about various allegations that his heroes face in their personal lives? It cannot be. There are various people whose personal life does not reflect the success in their professions such as Tiger Woods whose life has been mired with scandals and that of Robert Downey Junior who had been to rehabilitation centers more than to the studio before his commerical success in the film Iron Man. The society can still choose to pick regions of determination and hard work which can motivate their younger generations and leave the darker regions.

With various opportunities emerging in this fast pacing world, it is hard to imagine that given proper resources any person can choose not to be successful. Rise of entreprenuers such as Mark Zuckerberg, Elon Musk and Jeff Bezos have shown that there are various domains in which a person can be successful. Given such rising number of stars it is hard to choose one person as a hero eternally. But, with such various options to select from, a combination of heroes can serve the purpose of an individual or a group of people. Bill Gates and Jeff Bezos can serve as examples to those who wish to be rich and that of Musk and Zuckerberg can serve as examples to those who are extremely tech savvy.

There are certain cases where people rise to instant fame through youtube or instagram. Their success is ephemeral, but still these people have motivated many to pursue such ambitions. It is essential that the society differentiates such short lived success and discourage its members from falling into such traps.

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Average: 5.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 269, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...for someone to remain a hero for a long period of time but not they way in which the author me...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, still, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1860.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 390.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76923076923 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54665344854 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515384615385 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.5525527552 60.3974514979 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.0 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.13333333333 5.21951772744 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112902424634 0.243740707755 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0338637672579 0.0831039109588 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433299599683 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0761032455818 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458686701227 0.0667264976115 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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