It is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as a hero.
According with the claim, it is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as a hero. Although this statement could present some minor strengths, there are certain arguments which prove that it is widely flawed. The main reason that support this thesis is that there are a lot of people who spend their lives serving others without asking anything, such as money or benefits. In addition, some people who are following their dreams looking for profits in a free society, are making contributions to the world, so they can be considered as heroes too. In what follows, I will explain these points and I will provide some examples to brace them. Moreover, I will show an analysis from the other side.
To begin, even in our current society, we can find people who develop an amazing work helping others. Since this people usually do not demand anything in change, we can consider them as heroes. This people are not usually seen on TV due to their low profile, but I have seen many of them working in my country. I belong to a poor country in which politicians are nothing but criminal. Fortunately, there are persons like the Fathers of the Catholic Church who helps the poor giving them food, warm bedrooms and clothes. In addition, there are another kind of hero. In a free market society, the only way that a man or a woman can be successful is through the production of excellent goods and services at lower prices. Even when some may argue that this last explanation cannot be considered as hero, it is true only if the society is not free. In that case, prices will be higher.
On the other hand, some may argue that only the war soldiers of the past can be considered as heroes. However, this argument is flawed because there are many ways in which a person can be helpful, not just in wars. For example, a president who reduces taxes and public expending will increase the domestic save and, therefore, the investment rate. Consequently, the capitalization rate will grow and so the salaries; becoming him into a modern hero.
In conclusion, it is possible to regard some living man or woman as a hero in a free society because there are people who do wonderful things in order to serve others, either they pursue a profit or not. Although there are some minor points that could challenge my thesis such as that only the soldiers of the past are truly heroes, it is not a sufficiently sound argument due to the reasons mentioned previously.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2043.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 440.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64318181818 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48108443199 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513636363636 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 646.2 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3101181054 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.2857142857 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9523809524 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42857142857 5.21951772744 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228744700415 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0726763003917 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.175889516093 0.0758088955206 232% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14810635937 0.150359130593 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100884612581 0.0667264976115 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.1392134831 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 12.1639044944 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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