In the following argument, it is stated that the Pleasantville High School should urge the students to fulfill 40 hours of community service prior to their graduation. The author has come to this conclusion based on the undue assumption that if students engaged in community service, their assistance in local charities would be increased and would be helpful for the future of the student. However, before the author’s contention can be properly evaluated, three assumptions must be examined.
at the first, the author prematurely presumes that institute a program that forces the student to pass 40 hours in community service will encourage them to assist more with charities. It is possible that this obligation has a reverse effect on the student and subsequently not only don’t provide any helpful measure in order to fulfill the charities needs but also make a lot of problem for these organization and take significant energy and time from them to resolve the disorders. If the scenario has merit, the drawn conclusion in the original argument is significantly weakened.
Secondly, the argument claims, without justification, that teachers, parents and other community member agree with a importance of teaching student about the value of community services. This statement is clearly vague because the author didn’t mention anything about the what types of the community service consider as a importance. Perhaps, different parents and teachers have various ideas about this topic, some of them may think that their children are better to work with a charity that engaged in the healthcare but there is not any kind of this charity in the Pleasantville, so the importance of engaging in community services may decrease in their mind. Because of these probabilities and lake of the definite explanation the author conclusion will impugn remarkably.
Finally, the argument without warrant assumes that this program helps the student to understand the importance of giving back to their community. It is conceivable that 40 hours is very insufficient for that purpose because there isn’t any authentic research that referred to it. there is a probability that If you dedicate an improper amount of time to something, most of the time you will get a reverse result. Therefore, if the above is true, the author conclusion doesn’t hold water.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is flawed due to its reliance on unwarranted assumptions. If the author able to correct the aforementioned assumption and provide more information, it will be possible that increase and improve the viability of his deduction and program.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 425 350
No. of Characters: 2165 1500
No. of Different Words: 211 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.54 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.094 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.85 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 163 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 139 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 94 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.553 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.534 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.107 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: At
...three assumptions must be examined. at the first, the author prematurely presu...
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Line 3, column 376, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun problem seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of problems'.
Suggestion: a lot of problems
...lfill the charities needs but also make a lot of problem for these organization and take signifi...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 397, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this organization' or 'these organizations'?
Suggestion: this organization; these organizations
...eeds but also make a lot of problem for these organization and take significant energy and time fr...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 116, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...s and other community member agree with a importance of teaching student about th...
^
Line 5, column 326, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...es of the community service consider as a importance. Perhaps, different parents ...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2245.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 421.0 441.139720559 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3325415677 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99337740367 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515439429929 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 710.1 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.9066454774 57.8364921388 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.3125 119.503703932 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3125 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.625 5.70786347227 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115365710561 0.218282227539 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.03440294894 0.0743258471296 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0375038740808 0.0701772020484 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.062270633187 0.128457276422 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0393604480229 0.0628817314937 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 14.3799401198 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 98.500998004 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.