The argument that the total demand for electricity will remain the same or even decrease because of the manufacture of home appliances which consume less electricity, is not logically convincing because it made three assumptions which might not hold true.
The first assumption is that all household will be able to purchase the energy efficient appliances. It is important to state that eagerness to conserve energy does not equate financial capacity to purchase the energy efficient appliances. This assumption might not hold true if an insignificant number of households are able to acquire the new appliances. Due to the cost associated, only 5 out of a 100 households might have access to these appliances while others do not. In this case, the argument assumes that the sample considered is representative of the whole population considered thus flaws the argument.
The argument also assumes that the population of people in the area will remain the same. What about cases whereby more people migrate to the area? This vividly implies, more energy being consumed, thus increasing the demand of energy in the area and might result in construction of new generating plants.
Furthermore, the argument assumes that the products being marketed by the manufacturers are truly energy efficient. Perhaps, this might just be an idea brought up to get their products sold. In this case, if the products are found to consume more energy, the total demand for electricity will not only increase, more generating plants will need to be constructed.
In conclusion, if the assumptions earlier mentioned prove unwarranted, the argument is not logically sound and is therefore flawed. Thus, to strengthen the argument, the author needs to confirm that a larger part of the population, if not all, can afford to get the appliances, that the population considered will remain the same or reduce and that the claim by the manufacturers of such energy efficient products are true.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 318 350
No. of Characters: 1616 1500
No. of Different Words: 144 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.223 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.082 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.822 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.333 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.368 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.619 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.113 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, so, then, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1665.0 2260.96107784 74% => OK
No of words: 318.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2358490566 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9110411259 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48427672956 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.4472430397 57.8364921388 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.928571429 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7142857143 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.70786347227 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124859402737 0.218282227539 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.049441724257 0.0743258471296 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0612076989412 0.0701772020484 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0691200328186 0.128457276422 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280334133112 0.0628817314937 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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