"At the small, nonprofit hospital in the town of Saluda, the average length of a patient’s stay is two days; at the large, for-profit hospital in the nearby city of Megaville, the average patient stay is six days. Also, the cure rate among patients in the Saluda hospital is about twice that of the Megaville hospital. The Saluda hospital has more employees per patient than the hospital in Megaville, and there are few complaints about service at the local hospital. Such data indicate that treatment in smaller, nonprofit hospitals is more economical and of better quality than treatment in larger, for-profit hospitals."
In this argument author conclude that treatment in small,non-profit hospital is economical compared to large non-profit hospital based on data from two hospital. In this argument there are many flaws present. Due to this flaws argument mislead readers. This argument is not convincing and unsound.
Firstly, the author has talked about the shorter stay of patients in the small, nonprofit hospital than in the larger hospital. However, he has not mentioned the number of patients and the type of illness for which they were admitted in the two hospitals. Moreover,Every disease has its own time to cure. A shorter stay does not mean that the patient is fully cured. Hence, comparison of Saluda and Megaville hospitals on this basis is not convincing.
Secondly, the author has mentioned that the cure rate among patients in the Saluda hospital is twice that in Megaville hospital.Here again author has not mentioned type of disease which play an important role to cure a patient.Usually, small hospitals do not have many specialist departments and so the patients suffering from minor disease are admitted there. Therefore, their stay might be for a smaller period.While on other hand Large hospital have many special department like heart specialist, Nuro-surgon.The patients suffering from serious disease usually go to bigger hospitals where the specialists are available for almost all the diseases and hence they are sure of good treatment.
Thirdly, according to the author, the number of employees per patient is more at the Saluda hospital as compared to the Megaville hospital. However, as we do not know about the number of patients at both the hospitals we cannot compare them at this point. It might be that the Saluda hospital has less number of patients, hence more number of employees per patient are available. One more point that the author has mentioned is that there are few complaints at the smaller hospitals. The author has not thought that the reason behind this could be that their stay at the hospital was for a short duration of two days and they might be suffered from minor illness. Since the treatment is also low-cost in a non-profit hospital, it is possible that patients do not complain much
Finally,The author has concluded this argument just on the basis of two hospitals. So data for conclusion is insufficient and There should have been more evidence to conclude that smaller hospitals are economical than the bigger hospitals. He should have the cases of some more hospitals, the number of patients treated there, the illness of patients, the cost of their treatment etc. It would have strengthened the argument.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 441 350
No. of Characters: 2171 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.583 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.923 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.493 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 94 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.05 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.4 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.341 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.554 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.129 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 57, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , non-profit
... author conclude that treatment in small,non-profit hospital is economical compared to larg...
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Line 1, column 222, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'flaws'' or 'flaw's'?
Suggestion: flaws'; flaw's
...ere are many flaws present. Due to this flaws argument mislead readers. This argument...
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Line 5, column 265, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Every
... admitted in the two hospitals. Moreover,Every disease has its own time to cure. A sho...
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Line 9, column 129, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Here
...tal is twice that in Megaville hospital.Here again author has not mentioned type of ...
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Line 9, column 228, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Usually
...lay an important role to cure a patient.Usually, small hospitals do not have many speci...
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Line 9, column 414, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: While
...heir stay might be for a smaller period.While on other hand Large hospital have many ...
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Line 9, column 513, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...ment like heart specialist, Nuro-surgon.The patients suffering from serious disease...
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Line 17, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , The
...tients do not complain much Finally,The author has concluded this argument just...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, while, as for
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2240.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 434.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16129032258 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8025414862 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.423963133641 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 685.8 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.9100692585 57.8364921388 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309286823557 0.218282227539 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.098596605102 0.0743258471296 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717229131415 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181363593695 0.128457276422 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.090058023641 0.0628817314937 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 12.3882235529 44% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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