“The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. This sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 bird species that live in our area. Although only a small percentage of the land will be sold to Smith, the proposed development will have disastrous consequences for our area. The company plans to build a small hotel on the land. Although they have promised to ensure the preservation of the sanctuary, there is no way that their plans will do anything but harm the sanctuary. There are no circumstances under which this sale will benefit our community, which relies on tourists who visit primarily to see our magnificent bird population.”
As The Smith Corporation want to develop the land into a hotel, the environmental group should first have a discussion with the Corporation regarding this matter. How can the environmental protection group decide that there is no plan. There can be some circumstances under which this sale will benefit the community which relies on tourists who visit primarily to see the bird population. May be, The Smith Corporation is ready to bear the cost the maintaining sanctuary. May be, The Smith Corporation have plans to extend the sanctuary for the extending the number tourist which will eventually help in increasing the profit as well as aid in sanctuary development.
Though, the construction will affect the environment but The Smith Corporation can measurable steps to rebuild the atmosphere of sanctuary in the long term.
In addition to that, the sanctuary itself is a touristic place there should be a hotel nearby where tourist can stay and do the bird-watching. As the hotel would be nearby, tourists will have easy access to early morning bird watching. As this step will increase the number of tourist, this means more the income of the The Smith Corporation, which means more tax will be paid by Smith Corporation which will ultimately help in developing the Youngtown in number of ways. Though these are not the short term goals but anyhow this will affect the development in long term. Also, it is clearly mentioned that hotel will occupy only small percentage of land so this could also be discussed between environmental protection group and The Smith Corporation.
The final verdict is that any type of construction will affect the environment but thinking in the long term we can maintain the balance between environment and development required for as the necessity of human being.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 297 350
No. of Characters: 1479 1500
No. of Different Words: 143 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.151 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.98 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.83 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 89 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 67 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.447 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.379 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.57 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 317, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
... tourist, this means more the income of the The Smith Corporation, which means more tax...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 317, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'The' is left.
Suggestion: the; The
... tourist, this means more the income of the The Smith Corporation, which means more tax...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, may, regarding, so, well, in addition, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 55.5748502994 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1514.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 297.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09764309764 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8781321245 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505050505051 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 705.55239521 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.3097213011 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.166666667 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.58333333333 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206705215765 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0855988039286 0.0743258471296 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0495244245578 0.0701772020484 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11706626028 0.128457276422 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0714653375618 0.0628817314937 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 98.500998004 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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