The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. This sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 bird species that live in our area. Although only a small percentage of the land will be sold to Smith, the proposed development will have disastrous consequences for our area. The company plans to build a small hotel on the land. Although they have promised to ensure the preservation of the sanctuary, there is no way that their plans will do anything but harm the sanctuary. There are no circumstances under which this sale will benefit our community, which relies on tourists who visit primarily to see our magnificent bird population.”
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The petition sent by the environmental protection group reagarding that the Smith Corporation should not be allowed to build the hotel because, it will create harm to the sanctuary, Since, the petition does not directly states the reasons why the land should not be given, it have various flaws in it.
Firstly,the petition statesthat the dvelopement of the land will have disastrous effects, but, have not given any evidence proving that it will be disastrous to the area. There can be a case like the Smith Corporation is building the hotel and having effluent treatment plants in a way that they will not cause any harm to the surrounding area. The Smith Corporation maybe having facilities in their hotel like first Aid or any other veterinary help for the sanctuary. Tus, evidence should be provided by the group regarding this.
Secondly, the petition states that the developemnt of the land will have disastrous consequences to the area but doesn't give or provide the reasons for why it will create disastrous consequences to our area. It has been stated in the petition that only a small portion of land will be given to the corporation thus, that will not create any disastrous effects to that area. Maybe there will be a case like they are requesting only a small percentage of area because they are concerned with the sanctuary their. The corporation may be having a very small customer base and maybe they be creating a conference room for the Yountown Wildlife Sanctuary authority in the hotel to regularly discuss how the sanctuary could be managed or any other meetings regarding the protection of the sanctuary.
Also, it has been stated in the petition that tourists come to visit the sanctuary primarily to see the magnificient bir population. In this case, the hotel maybe providing the tourists a place to live in or eat which will be resulting in the developement of the area through the taxes which will be paid by the hotel. It will also create employability for various people in the Youngtown and thus, benefitting their lives also. There may also be the case like, the Smith Corporation maybe thinking to spend some portion of the revenue earned in the welfare of the sanctuary. Hence, the statement stated by the petition doesn't provide any solid proof that it will not benefit our community.
Thus, regarding the implications discussed, the petition holds many flaws in it and should provide evidences and have a good scrutiny in the sense that what is the purpose of the Smith Corporation behind building this hotel or why the land developement will create harmful effects for the sanctuary.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 447 350
No. of Characters: 2141 1500
No. of Different Words: 170 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.598 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.79 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.669 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.8 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.583 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.397 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.595 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.104 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 221, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'state'
Suggestion: state
..., Since, the petition does not directly states the reasons why the land should not be ...
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Line 1, column 277, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
...ns why the land should not be given, it have various flaws in it. Firstly,the p...
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Line 5, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...t have various flaws in it. Firstly,the petition statesthat the dvelopement of ...
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Line 9, column 114, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...disastrous consequences to the area but doesnt give or provide the reasons for why it ...
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Line 13, column 424, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...gtown and thus, benefitting their lives also. There may also be the case like, the S...
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Line 13, column 621, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...e, the statement stated by the petition doesnt provide any solid proof that it will no...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 16.3942115768 171% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2197.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 444.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9481981982 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71383873211 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.394144144144 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 680.4 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.1345226513 57.8364921388 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.466666667 119.503703932 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6 23.324526521 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233949641955 0.218282227539 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0971489951114 0.0743258471296 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437761917525 0.0701772020484 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151114847493 0.128457276422 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358974046887 0.0628817314937 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.3799401198 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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