Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In my view, the assumption made by the author has flaws because author is relating the business with the number of skateboarders. Let's have a critical view on this assumption.
How can one say that the skateboarding impacts the number of shopkeepers in the Central Plaza? This is the main flaw here. Skateboarding is a general type of fun sport played by the individuals which has nothing to do with the attraction of the shopkeepers towards a mall. Generally, shopkeepers reduce their visit to a shopping place when that place doesn't satisfy the needs of an customer. Maybe the Central Plaza is not provding the customers the range of clothes which the customers are expecting? Maybe the ambience of the place? or anything else which doesn't satisfy the consumer needs.
The another thing that needs to be questioned here is that the author says that this change is happening since 2 years. There is no statistical evidence provided for that by the author. The author should provide the statistical data so that a person will believe that the number of customers has been declined and so the revenue.
The author gives a recommendation that, the city should prohibit skateboarding so that the business of the Central Plaza will restore to its normal pace. Firstly, as I mentioned in the first paragraph that there is no relation of a sport with the business. Another thing is that, even if we assume that the skateboarding is impacting the business. Have author provided the evidence that the sport is being played anywhere in the vicinity of the Central Plaza? Maybe they play in the city ground far away from the place.
The one thing that can have the impact on the business is maybe as provided by the author there has been dramatic increase in litter and vandalism. We should emphasize on "dramatic increase". Thus, dramatic increase in litter and vandalism might have impacted the business of the plaza because it may have slowly impacted the customer appeal for the infrastructure. Afterall, the ambience of the place plays one of the major roles in customer going to a place for shopping.
Finally, there is a huge flaw in the argument stated by the author as it is not providing any direct evidence for relation of skateboarding and business revenue. Not to ignore the fact that the author has not provided any statistical data of the decrease in business revenue of the last 2 years.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, may, so, thus, another thing, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2006.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 411.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88077858881 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77812004687 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.430656934307 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 627.3 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.2286064 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2173913043 119.503703932 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8695652174 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.70786347227 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17656346017 0.218282227539 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0499325279659 0.0743258471296 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0553295370507 0.0701772020484 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0877540117303 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0333368932249 0.0628817314937 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.3799401198 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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