“The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. This sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 bird species that live in our area. Although only a small percentage of the land will be sold to Smith, the proposed development will have disastrous consequences for our area. The company plans to build a small hotel on the land. Although they have promised to ensure the preservation of the sanctuary, there is no way that their plans will do anything but harm the sanctuary. There are no circumstances under which this sale will benefit our community, which relies on tourists who visit primarily to see our magnificent bird population.”
The argument concludes saying that there are tourist who visits the sanctuary to have a look at the magnificient bird population and also says that a part of it is going to be sold to the smith corporation.The corporation also assures that they won't harm the sanctuary at all.Somewhat looking at the argument,there are some misjointed and incomplete data which weakens tha argument.There is lack of some necessary data which is not given in the argument.
Firstly,if the tourist are visiting the sanctuary such often then why is even a small part of land is being sold to the Smith corporation? The reason might be that: some part of the land might be unuseful for the wildlife sanctuary and they might have decided to sold that pice of land.Also only the preservation of birds would not require that much amount of land.Besides,the land which is sold might be used for some economical gains which might be beneficial for the sanctuary.
Secondly,the argument says that the sale will not benefit the community.The sale of that small piece of land would actually be beneficial for the sanctuary if the corporation is planning to build a small hotel over that piece of land because ultimately the tourists would always prefer staying in that particular hotel nearby the sanctuary.They would prefer that especially to hear the chirping sound of the birds as the sanctuary would be nearby the hotel.
Thirdly,the argument claims the corporation is anyways going to harm the sanctuary.Convincing reasoning why the writer said this statement is not given in the argument.Besides this,the corporation even assured that they would take every measures for the preservation of the sanctuary.The corporation can achieve this by taking several precautionary measures and strict rules which must be followed by the customers staying over there.Maintaining silence,not throwing any garbage here and there would be some of the measures.
Conclusively,according to me,the writer has drawn optimistic conclusion from misjointed and incomplete data.No convincing reasoning is given.The conclusion is justied from wishy washy observations which are likely to be incorrect
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 364 350
No. of Characters: 1783 1500
No. of Different Words: 154 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.368 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.898 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.638 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 107 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 52 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 28.036 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.456 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.823 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.129 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ing to be sold to the smith corporation.The corporation also assures that they wont...
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Suggestion: Somewhat
...hat they wont harm the sanctuary at all.Somewhat looking at the argument,there are some ...
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... at all.Somewhat looking at the argument,there are some misjointed and incomplete data...
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...omplete data which weakens tha argument.There is lack of some necessary data which is...
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...a which is not given in the argument. Firstly,if the tourist are visiting the ...
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...s not given in the argument. Firstly,if the tourist are visiting the sanctuary ...
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Suggestion: Also
... have decided to sold that pice of land.Also only the preservation of birds would no...
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Line 3, column 289, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
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... have decided to sold that pice of land.Also only the preservation of birds would no...
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...ld not require that much amount of land.Besides,the land which is sold might be used fo...
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...require that much amount of land.Besides,the land which is sold might be used for so...
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...ight be beneficial for the sanctuary. Secondly,the argument says that the sale...
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...the sale will not benefit the community.The sale of that small piece of land would ...
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...t particular hotel nearby the sanctuary.They would prefer that especially to hear th...
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... sanctuary would be nearby the hotel. Thirdly,the argument claims the corporat...
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... would be nearby the hotel. Thirdly,the argument claims the corporation is anyw...
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...s not given in the argument.Besides this,the corporation even assured that they woul...
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...s for the preservation of the sanctuary.The corporation can achieve this by taking ...
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...wed by the customers staying over there.Maintaining silence,not throwing any garbage here a...
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...s staying over there.Maintaining silence,not throwing any garbage here and there wou...
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...ing any garbage here and there would be some of the measures. Conclusively,according ...
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... there would be some of the measures. Conclusively,according to me,the writer ...
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...ion from misjointed and incomplete data.No convincing reasoning is given.The concl...
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...e data.No convincing reasoning is given.The conclusion is justied from wishy washy ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, anyway, besides, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1820.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 341.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33724340176 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.33025258747 2.78398813304 120% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478005865103 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 19.7664670659 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 56.0 22.8473053892 245% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 136.564290924 57.8364921388 236% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 303.333333333 119.503703932 254% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 56.8333333333 23.324526521 244% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 16.8333333333 5.70786347227 295% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 28.0 5.25449101796 533% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220060344509 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124302518957 0.0743258471296 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0446333043903 0.0701772020484 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121602239624 0.128457276422 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519078023053 0.0628817314937 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 32.1 14.3799401198 223% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 14.64 48.3550499002 30% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.1628742515 222% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.1 12.197005988 206% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.58 12.5979740519 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.93 8.32208582834 119% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 30.0 12.3882235529 242% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 24.4 11.1389221557 219% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 30.0 11.9071856287 252% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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