The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. This sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 bird species that live in our area.Although only a small percentage of the land will be sold to Smith, the proposed development will have disastrous consequences foe our area.The company plans to build a small hotel on the land .Although they have promised to ensure the preservation of the sanctuary,there is no way that their plans will do anything but harm the sanctuary. There are no circumstances under which this sale will benefit our community,which relies on tourists who visit primarily to see our magnificent bird population.
The petition sent by environmental protection group to the residents of youngtown states that the smith corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is a part of youngtown wild preserve as it will lead to disastrous effects on the bird species in the area. However, the argument is based on unwarranted assumptions and three questions need to be answered for a logical conclusion on whether that land is to be developed or not.
First, it was claimed that the sanctuary is essential for the survival of numerous bird species. This may be factual but how the sanctuary would be inadequate to provide sustenance to the birds in the preserve with the development project. Maybe, only a small portion of sanctuary will be utilised for the project. Further, there is no evidence claiming that entire sanctuary is necessary for the wild-life preserve. Also, only half of the sanctuary is necessary for the bird species. therefore, there are limited assumptions needed in order to form a cogent argument.
Next, it was claimed that the project will have disastrous consequences in the area and it would only harm the sanctuary but nowhere it is reported that what would be the harmful effects in developing a project. Moreover, it is given that the company needs to build a small hotel and therefore building a hotel will not result in serious effects. Indeed, the company promised to ensure the preservation of the sanctuary and so there might be legal agreement between the company and the sanctuary. If it is violated, the company might face trouble and so they definitely will try not to harm the sanctuary.
Finally, a claim is made that a large number of tourists visit the sanctuary to see the bird species and therefore they would be delighted to have a hotel nearby the sanctuary. additionally, with the increase in hotel occupants, the national economy is likely to boost. Thus, the claim employs false logic and there are consequences in which the construction of a small area in the preserve could benefit the community.
To conclude, the petition from environmental protection group can answer the above mentioned questions and additionally may provide evidence to their assumptions.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 367 350
No. of Characters: 1804 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.377 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.916 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.79 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.214 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.094 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.363 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.636 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.095 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 72, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tal protection group to the residents of youngtown states that the smith corporat...
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Line 3, column 453, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rve. Also, only half of the sanctuary is necessary for the bird species. therefor...
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Line 3, column 487, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...ary is necessary for the bird species. therefore, there are limited assumptions needed i...
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Line 3, column 571, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ded in order to form a cogent argument. Next, it was claimed that the project wi...
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Line 5, column 607, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ely will try not to harm the sanctuary. Finally, a claim is made that a large nu...
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Line 7, column 31, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ary. Finally, a claim is made that a large number of tourists visit the sanctuary to see the...
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Line 7, column 178, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Additionally
...d to have a hotel nearby the sanctuary. additionally, with the increase in hotel occupants, ...
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Line 9, column 62, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tion from environmental protection group can answer the above mentioned questions...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1853.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 367.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04904632153 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86860294112 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471389645777 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0733204515 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.8125 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9375 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.625 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279966524029 0.218282227539 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0860326586277 0.0743258471296 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0835513865813 0.0701772020484 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13924047987 0.128457276422 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111940165164 0.0628817314937 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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