SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's original headquarters. Moreover, Middlesburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision.
The argument is based on several assumptions and doesn't give any inkling about whether said assumptions are factually correct or not.
The argument assumes that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg as there has been a surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville. This reasoning has several flaws. Maybe Middlesburg has run out area to expand as it has already urbanized in all expanses, and doesn't have more area to build houses. More number of people are buying houses in Corporatesville can be based on the fact that maybe it is the nearest town to Middlesburg due to which people can travel to and fro between Corporateville and Middlesburg for work without having to stay in Middlesburg.
The argument also fails to provide any reasons for the result of its survey. The employees might have reacted in such a way due to the traffic conditions in Middlesburg. But this issue of traffic congestion might only be for a short term since, the municipal corporation of Middlesburg is constructing a metro system connecting all the parts of the city, causingto several log jams in a lot of areas. However, once the construction is complete, the average travelling time for the employees will be cut in half.
Finally, it has been stated that corporatesville has lower taxes than Middlesburg which makes it both cheap and safer. This a totally flawed argument, since lower taxes doesn't imply that the city is safer. In fact, there might be more threats to safety in Middlesburg as it isn't an urban setting, which means that there won't be any CCTV camera's around the town. Also, since the town might be scarcely populated which would lead to more crime as it is not densely packed. There won't be a lot of people around to report suscpicious activity to the police. The argument also assumes that the town will be cheaper for the company, but it disregards several factors such as transportation. Due to corporatesville being an urban centre, there wouldn't be any problem in transportation but the same can't be said in a rural setting. Whatever the company might save in taxes might have to be paid for transportation costs.
Hence, it can be concluded that as long as more research isn't done into the consequences of shifting Supercorp headquarters to Corporatesville, it isn't advisable to do so.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 404 350
No. of Characters: 1901 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.483 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.705 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.932 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.335 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.309 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.528 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.057 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... already urbanized in all expanses, and doesnt have more area to build houses. More nu...
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...ally flawed argument, since lower taxes doesnt imply that the city is safer. In fact, ...
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Suggestion: isn't
... threats to safety in Middlesburg as it isnt an urban setting, which means that ther...
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Suggestion: wouldn't
...ratesville being an urban centre, there wouldnt be any problem in transportation but th...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... problem in transportation but the same cant be said in a rural setting. Whatever th...
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Suggestion: isn't
...orp headquarters to Corporatesville, it isnt advisable to do so.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, hence, however, if, may, so, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1948.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 395.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93164556962 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98197759115 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491139240506 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2522821629 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.222222222 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9444444444 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.70786347227 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112211394645 0.218282227539 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0413640755507 0.0743258471296 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.092092254504 0.0701772020484 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0654842045614 0.128457276422 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0763250562016 0.0628817314937 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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