People who make decisions based on emotion and justify those decisions with logic afterwards are poor decision makers.
In professional circles, it is kind of taboo to base your decisions on your emotions. People who take such decisions are deemed as impulsive and capricious, henceforth not to be trusted with crucial work. The author of the issue is in a quandary whether such people are poor decision makers or not.
It is true that decisions taken on the basis of logic and hard core facts seldom fail. Before taking any decision, the impact of that decision should be properly analyzed. This can be done in various ways such as brain storming, lateral thinking methods, analyzing trends etc. Some of the most successful people in our world are renknowned for their ability to separate their emotions from their decision making. People like Steve Jobs and Mark Zuckerberg spring immediately to the mind when thinking of such people. Both of their stories are quite similar when we consider that they set aside their personal relationships completely with family and friends when it came to making sure that their companies succeeded. We can also see examples throughout history where controlling the personal emotions was a paramount part of some cultures. The shaolin monks from Tibet, the samurais from Japan and the sages from India all practiced this way of life. In some cases, decisions based on gut feelings bring huge success. These decisions are in fact based on emotions which engender a false sense of confidence in the person which is quite dangerous.
It can also be argued that some issues require a person to have an emotional connection. For example, during a war between two countries, there would be a greater effort to ensure peace and tranquility between the countries if lives of people we know are being endangered. Otherwise, there will be little empathy towards either country.
Therefore, I can clearly state that even though decisions based on emotions can be successful in some cases, they shouldn't be relied upon too much. Judgements should be made logically after considering all the factors and implications of the the results.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, so, therefore, for example, in fact, kind of, such as, in some cases, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1712.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 339.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05014749263 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60413006083 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 215.323595506 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604719764012 0.4932671777 123% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.5571614221 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.1111111111 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8333333333 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38888888889 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2920983189 0.243740707755 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0945250342166 0.0831039109588 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0781216772139 0.0758088955206 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17907032613 0.150359130593 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112897914203 0.0667264976115 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.