The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The issue at hand states that instilling a sense of cooperation instead of competition into the youth of a society will prepare them for leadership roles. I mostly agree with the claim but it has to be understood that this issue is not completely black or white, but it is somewhere in between in the shades of grey.
In the real world, it is necessary for a person to interact with people coming from different backgrounds, having different ideologies and different opinions. Therefore, it is very important that a person should be able to work in such a diverse arena without hindering the progress of the institiution. This means that the person should be able to cooperate with other people. This allows for a vibrant democracy to be established in the organization where everyone can feel important because it can be practically observed that implementation of different ideas is done through intellectual discourse with various individuals rather than a theocratic decision making system. Heightened competition can often feel like a rat race, or like survival of the fittest, which is not healthy for the society. A society thrives when a leader takes into account the problems being faced by the society by interacting with them, trying to build bridges between communities at odds through dialog, etc. For example, let us look at the case of the USA and Russia. Both the countries have been the biggest superpowers of the 21st century, always having competed with each other with an aim to one up the other. But the cooperation exhibited by both the nations in the field of space exploration since the early 1990's has catapulted the entire human race to new heights.
But a counter argument can also be made that being competition builds the character of a person. This can be witnesed everyday in the field of sports. For example, in soccer, Messi and Ronaldo have dominated the sport for over a decade constantly pushing each other to do better and both of them are seen as leaders for whichever team they play. Competition is a necessary aspect for a person to develop mental fortitude which is essential for a leader. Healthy competition can be beneficial i.e. when the competitors themselves have respect for each other instead of a mutual hatred.
Therefore, it is my opinion that competition is an important factor for a person to develop leadership charecteristics, but it is absolutely essential for a person to be able to learn to cooperate with other people to become a respected and reknowned leader.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 119, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...acter of a person. This can be witnesed everyday in the field of sports. For example, in...
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Line 13, column 131, Rule ID: ABSOLUTELY_ESSENTIAL[1]
Message: Use simply 'essential'.
Suggestion: essential
...p leadership charecteristics, but it is absolutely essential for a person to be able to learn to coo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, still, therefore, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2115.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 425.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97647058824 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87330055082 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512941176471 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.6026078146 60.3974514979 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.411764706 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.58823529412 5.21951772744 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222185643962 0.243740707755 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0770601889251 0.0831039109588 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.070042301922 0.0758088955206 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160702797731 0.150359130593 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0238722662694 0.0667264976115 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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