SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's current headquarters. Moreover, Middleburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author of this arguement beleives that Supercorp made a good decision in moving it's headquarters from Middleburg to Corporateville. While the author does offer some explanations as to why Middleburg is superier, he/she does not substantiate the claims, leaving the arguement rife with holes and assumptions that render the arguement untrustworthy.
First, the author claims that the surge in homeownders in Corporateville directly indicates that the location is a superior place to live. By claiming this, the author makes the assumption that quality of life is congruent to quantity of citizens. However, this is a flawed arguement. A high amount of homeowners does not necessarily mean that the city is superior. We are given no information on the types of homes or the socio-economic status of Corporateville. If the homes in Corporateville were small, low quality homes in an inconvenient area, the quality of life would not be enjoyable to incoming homeowners. A poverty-stricken area may very well be well populated, but that doesn't necessarily mean it is a "better" place to live.
Further, the author uses the results of an employee survey that showed workers prefer to live in areas that are not urban. Without any further information about this survey, we must take it's results with a grain of salt. We don't know how many employees were surveyed or where these employees are from. If the employees surveyed were, say, all older generations with families, the desire for a more suburban area would make sense. However, if the survey did not interview a wide range of ages, it may not reflect the fact that a larger amount of SuperCorp's employees are young business-people who thrive in the big city. By blindly trusting a survey, the author makes the assumption that all of SuperCorp would prefer a suburban setting. This runs the risk of alienating part of SuperCorp's employee base, failing to ask about their desires and possibly causing them to leave the company our of a desire to work in a big city.
Lastly, the author makes the assumption that lower taxes corrolates with a cheaper place to work. Unfortunately, this is not always a true statement. While government taxes may be cheaper in Corporateville, cost of living in Corporateville very well may be high. High rent prices, expensive amenities, pricey transportation methods - these are all unrelated to taxes and would create a community that is not what one would call "cheap." However, if the author was able to back of this claim with evidence of a cheaper lifestyle, then this arguement may become legitimate; for example, if they included prices of gas, food, transportation, and education in the surrounding area, then the assumption that Corporateville would be a cheaper place to live would be far more believable.
Without a more detailed analysis of the arguements set forth by the author, the claim that Supercorp made the best decision by moving to Corporateville is shaky at. By making assumptions regarding employee preferences, quality of life, and cost of living, the arguement becomes flawed and untrustworthy, depending too heavily on possibly biased or incomplete data. In order to rightfully prove that Supercorp did indeed make the right decision, the author must address these assumptions and provide ample evidence to back them up.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The author of this arguement beleives that Supercorp made a good decision in moving it's headquarters from Middleburg to Corporateville.
Error: beleives Suggestion: believes
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Sentence: While the author does offer some explanations as to why Middleburg is superier, he/she does not substantiate the claims, leaving the arguement rife with holes and assumptions that render the arguement untrustworthy.
Error: superier Suggestion: superior
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Sentence: First, the author claims that the surge in homeownders in Corporateville directly indicates that the location is a superior place to live.
Error: homeownders Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: However, this is a flawed arguement.
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Sentence: Lastly, the author makes the assumption that lower taxes corrolates with a cheaper place to work.
Error: corrolates Suggestion: correlates
Sentence: However, if the author was able to back of this claim with evidence of a cheaper lifestyle, then this arguement may become legitimate; for example, if they included prices of gas, food, transportation, and education in the surrounding area, then the assumption that Corporateville would be a cheaper place to live would be far more believable.
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Sentence: Without a more detailed analysis of the arguements set forth by the author, the claim that Supercorp made the best decision by moving to Corporateville is shaky at.
Error: arguements Suggestion: arguments
Sentence: By making assumptions regarding employee preferences, quality of life, and cost of living, the arguement becomes flawed and untrustworthy, depending too heavily on possibly biased or incomplete data.
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
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argument 1 -- not exactly. you told that: 'If the homes in Corporateville were small, low quality homes in an inconvenient area, the quality of life would not be enjoyable to incoming homeowners.', but first, why there is a surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville; second, maybe houses over there are all great with good quality
better to argue like:
1. maybe people buy houses not for good life over there, but for job opportunities
2. maybe people buy houses over there for investment purpose only, not for good life or living there.
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argument 2 -- not OK. In GRE, we have to accept all data or evidence are true and fair. It is important to find out loopholes behind surveys or studies. from the topic 'its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban.', the survey is about living place, not working place. Workers might want their headquarters to be placed at urban because they can commute in a short time or using public transportation.
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argument 3 -- OK but also need to argue 'not only a safer place to work'
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 547 350
No. of Characters: 2721 1500
No. of Different Words: 250 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.836 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.974 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.993 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 182 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 138 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 106 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 77 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.792 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.029 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.458 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.284 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.488 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.114 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 684, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...y very well be well populated, but that doesnt necessarily mean it is a 'better&a...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 714, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... but that doesnt necessarily mean it is a 'better' place to live. Fu...
^
Line 5, column 225, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ke its results with a grain of salt. We dont know how many employees were surveyed o...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, lastly, may, regarding, so, then, well, while, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2819.0 2260.96107784 125% => OK
No of words: 544.0 441.139720559 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18198529412 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82947280553 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16368055812 2.78398813304 114% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 204.123752495 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481617647059 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 889.2 705.55239521 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 92.9753712535 57.8364921388 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.565217391 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.652173913 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.91304347826 5.70786347227 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172866735833 0.218282227539 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532015778964 0.0743258471296 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529628458557 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100296470897 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426057053099 0.0628817314937 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 98.500998004 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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