Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study in which jobs are plentiful.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Education institutions may very well be tempted to urge children into fields of study that are sure the provide for them ample job opportunities. However, doing so would prove to cause more ham than good. Encouraging students to pursue fields of study across a wide scope of topics – not just those in which jobs are plentiful – is essential to a well functioning society.
In today’s day and age, the field of technology is growing rapidly – so rapidly, in fact, that jobs greatly outnumber applicants. Under this argument, students should be pushed into technological fields in order to fill this need for computer scientists and engineers. However, this would leave other equally important roles by the wayside. After all, what is a community without culture? The job market for painters, poets, and photographers is far from wanting, but these roles are inherently important to the culture of society. Artistic expression is vital, and the lifeblood of a society. We praise the works of Shakespeare, the photographs of Andy Warhol, the voice of Whitney Houston. By advocating only for these technological jobs, we are devaluing the validity of the arts, creating a society that lacks color and depth. Those with less marketable skill sets will be left wondering if they even fit into society at all.
Students are diverse in their beliefs, values, talents, and aspirations. One student may be a math whiz while her classmate may be a musical prodigy. Fostering these dreams and desires is incredibly important to mental health and well being of our youth. An artist who is forced into a technological field of study may struggle immensely. Their right-brain dominated mind, which is highly skilled at the creative, would not succeed in a computer science class in which creativity is all but relinquished. A perpetually struggling student who cannot grasp the complexity of physics would likely be quickly discouraged, causing mental and emotional distress. A distressed child grows up into a distressed adult, and a distressed adult would be hard pressed to succeed. These individuals would contribute little to their field, forced to live stagnant lives that offer to satisfaction. It is those who are passionate about their field that contribute most to the world.
It is important, however, to acknowledge the importance of educational institutions in the lives of impressionable children. By encouraging students to pursue fields of study that are more likely to land them jobs, schools are working to have the child’s best interest in mind, setting them up for a successful life. Though many would argue the demerits of such a society, it is undeniable that our world today is a capitalistic one. Income is a large factor in measuring quality of life, and by urging students to pursue careers in which they will have an easier time making and keeping a high income, these educational institutions are working to create the a future in which less of the population experience the hardships of poverty.
Pushing students into fields of study in which they are most likely to find jobs may seem like the ultimate act of goodwill, but as a whole society will not flourish under this mindset. Careers in math, science, and engineering are innately important, but lower earning sectors such as music and the arts are essential to the cultural diversity of society. Allowing students to pursue their desired paths, whatever they may be, allows for greater happiness, which in turn helps create a successful society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...dren into fields of study that are sure the provide for them ample job opportunities. Howev...
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Line 7, column 662, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: the; a
...onal institutions are working to create the a future in which less of the population ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, well, while, after all, in fact, such as, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.5258426966 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 82.0 58.6224719101 140% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2970.0 2235.4752809 133% => OK
No of words: 579.0 442.535393258 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12953367876 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90534594407 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86585177428 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 298.0 215.323595506 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514680483592 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 916.2 704.065955056 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.77640449438 507% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5019314514 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.071428571 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6785714286 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.82142857143 5.21951772744 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192664810987 0.243740707755 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0486850251969 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533355866527 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124488423605 0.150359130593 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435742148202 0.0667264976115 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 100.480337079 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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