Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study in which jobs are plentiful.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
Educational institutions have a responsibility to guide students into the field of study which will give them the best opportunity to become productive members of society. In recently studies, approximately 85% of incoming college freshman have cited future employment as a primary reason for pursuing higher education. Thus, as highlighted by the proposed policy, availability of work should be a key element of guidance. This policy should be enacted with the understanding that some individuals will not be satisfied with just any occupation. Its implementation involves sensitivity towards the personality and personal situation of each student, as well as to the maintenance of certain academic fields.
Without proper guidance, some pragmatic students may find themselves switching majors late in their college years upon realizing their career opportunities will not be as expected upon graduation. In the past decade, higher education institutions have been slandered as a money-making enterprise, due to the numbers of students who graduate to decades of monthly student loan payments. Therefore, at high school and collegiate level, institutions have an obligation to provide information about how studies do and will correspond with vocations in the world beyond its campus. Fortunately at high school level, criteria for acceptance into further education can itself filter students into areas where they can be most successful, or at least away from areas for which they are not competitive enough to qualify. For example, scholarships are offered to women applying to enter STEM programs, given the high demand for professionals in these fields. Although college degrees are increasingly seen as the only path to high-paying jobs in America, matriculating high school students should be informed of the many positions available through trade schools, such as construction or mechanic occupations.
The complex aspect of implementing this policy is that although many students seek education as a means for employment, some may not have considered their personal suitability for certain activities. Advocating only for careers in which work is plentiful would be a myopic approach to helping students select metiers best-suited for them, as otherwise the most bountiful opportunities will not make individuals happy in their lives. For some, financial gain will be a significant part of their emotional security, so only the most lucrative employment will satisfy. Others may not be able to maintain a position without being intellectually stimulated. For still others, the physical location or schedule of a job may have more influence on it’s desirability than any other aspect. Remuneration, stimulation or lifestyle specifics are additional motivation that students should be given ample opportunity to consider.
Due to societal assumptions that education equals employment, institutions do have an obligation to inform their students of the reality of this assumption. However, most of Americans will spend more time with colleagues and clients than their own families, joy and satisfaction with the activity is a critical aspect for a realistic criteria of future work.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, still, therefore, thus, well, as for, as to, at least, for example, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 12.9106741573 225% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2731.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 482.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.66597510373 5.05705443957 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15883820589 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 215.323595506 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566390041494 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 857.7 704.065955056 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4136935785 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.736842105 118.986275619 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3684210526 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73684210526 5.21951772744 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196637320595 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629698580806 0.0831039109588 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391972019426 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128243879561 0.150359130593 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0181707370342 0.0667264976115 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 14.1392134831 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 48.8420337079 60% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.9 12.1639044944 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.09 8.38706741573 120% => OK
difficult_words: 159.0 100.480337079 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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