I don’t think any educational institutions should encourage their students to study in the fields provide pupils more jobs. Due to the different functions of education institutions, some of the colleges/universities focus on researching in certain fields not profitable, even with a bright future of working opportunities. Thus, I suggest a “multi-level of educational institution system” that would benefit both the students and the high society in the follows.
To begin with, we should make clear foundation of an education institution system. In general, there are two kinds o’ system, on the one hand for teaching skills and the other for researching. In some universities, these two kinds of institution could merge as one campus, due to the setting-ups of a university. There as, some degree-earners will find work easily in money-making-majors like cuisine art or civil engineering. While some students, on the opposite-end of the spectrum, have to study hard and do well in the major to research. Possibly, they would spend lots of years in laboratories. Eventually, some might have a chance to become a professor(intern) themselves at last.
Subsequently, I shall make clear of the reason why anyone must study. In my concern, learning is a process to recognize and reconcile one’s self, the others and any society. Thus, in process of learning, learners may find on themselves what they might do in the future. Some people go to work early after their graduation, because their recognition of themselves. Or some join the army, all and every is their own choices. However, there are some students continue studying in their fields without finding employment beyond the laboratories, the researching-butchering center. Maybe these intuitive jobs are not lucrative, while such diversifications in warping constitutes the enterprise of everyone in this world. Hence, homo sapiens could drink more favorable coffee, buy the cook, as well as enjoy the development of new “5G technology” and surf “the Internet”.
Intriguingly, this is the path I will die on, not all the students who enters the gates of Banks becomes a professional analysists/banker. Likewise, without the servitude from servants in vast variating fields like: restaurants or gyms, a commoner’s life must be tedious and boring. So the education institution should take the students' choice into account; instead of inspiring them painstakingly to study in some majors that could be easier find jobs. Free will triumphants as command economy fades, so shall our standardized indoctrinating systemz.
Moreover, if the institutions encourage their student-peasants to study in some promising majors, there would be a severe surface competition waiting for the juniors when they graduate. It is easy to imagine the situation the more students applying for the jobs with limit occupations as many worms trying to dig in the same straw. Like decades ago, mechanical engineering was very popular in the job market. Nowadays, curses to the development in technology, machines are phasing out like leaves in fall. Highly educated engineers must enter a bloodbath resume war. Meanwhile the recession of the real economy (contrast to the financial and IT sector) could not take in more construction or production suppliers. Consequently, the graduates in this major suffered a lot pain when they left the universities.
In all, I believe we should emphasize the diversity and the student’s interest instead of the job market. People’s choice matters, and our society can’t have too much incompetent clone workers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: an
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Meanwhile,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, hence, however, if, likewise, may, moreover, so, thus, well, while, in general, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3094.0 2235.4752809 138% => OK
No of words: 562.0 442.535393258 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50533807829 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86893614481 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.45580004037 2.79657885939 124% => OK
Unique words: 319.0 215.323595506 148% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567615658363 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 949.5 704.065955056 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.8520116089 60.3974514979 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.8064516129 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1290322581 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164038233509 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0418158121798 0.0831039109588 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467366845119 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0915896160015 0.150359130593 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0374170874294 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.38 12.1639044944 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 169.0 100.480337079 168% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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