SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's original headquarters. Moreover, Middlesburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision.
The argument statement relies on multiple assumptions to project the point that Supercorp correctly moved their headquarters. However, these assumptions fall down due to their lack of supporting evidence and their proposed correlations.
The statement claims that due to the population increase in Corporarteville that it must be a more attractive place to live. This ignores the plethora of potential reasons that a citizen lives in a city. It can be said that a major reason for moving to a new city would be because of the attractiveness of the said city. However, if the city had lower quality housing and; thus, cheaper rent, this would also be a major driving factor. If there is further information on the motivations behind the recent surge in the population it could potentially be implied whether the city is a better place to live or not. Regardless, there are many statistical and demographical reasons for population change in a city and it would be difficult to pinpoint any single reason as to why the change occurred.
It can also be noted that the statement of the workers wishing to live in a less urban area relies heavily upon a survey. A survey can be a useful tool to estimate the wishes of a population. Nevertheless, there is not enough data to safely assume that this survey will represent the population fairly. For instance, the sample size used is not known. This means that a disproportionate number of employees could have been used, all with similar views, but the majority of employees were not consulted properly. Therefore, the survey will have skewed results. To try and counter this, a large sample size could be taken so that the views received will represent the entire workforce. Yet, there are still lingering issues. All the information that is given is that the employees "prefer to live in an area that is not urban". Thus, the type of environment that they do wish to live in is not known. Some may wish to live in a suburban area or some may wish to live in an extremely rural and isolated setting. It could, in fact, be that if all these options were in a representative survey that the urban area would command a majority.
Finally, assuming that lower taxes equates to increased safety and lower living costs has no proven correlation. The safety of an area depends on numerous factors: police services, reliable infrastructure and wealth, to name a few. It is not as simple to say that safety correlates to taxes. In fact, some services, such as the police or fire departments, may rely on taxes. This argument also only takes into account taxes as a cost for those living in the town. There are multiple other factors that could make living in an area more expensive: rent, house prices, cost of groceries and the price of gas. These are only some instances.
The logic for Supercorp to move their headquarters contains many flawed assumptions and potentially inaccurate information. Due to this, it is not possible to say if the correct decision was made by Supercorp. By providing more information and evidence the analysis could be improved, but there are still many complicating factors that would make coming to a suitable conclusion extremely difficult.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK. This survey is only about workers where to live, not about where to work.
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 30 15
No. of Words: 548 350
No. of Characters: 2598 1500
No. of Different Words: 251 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.838 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.741 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.734 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 169 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.267 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.506 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.633 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.24 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.442 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.066 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 564, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
...the survey will have skewed results. To try and counter this, a large sample size could...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, thus, as to, for instance, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 28.8173652695 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2684.0 2260.96107784 119% => OK
No of words: 548.0 441.139720559 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89781021898 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83832613839 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85109152679 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 204.123752495 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463503649635 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 872.1 705.55239521 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 19.7664670659 152% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.0236596694 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4666666667 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2666666667 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.9 5.70786347227 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0956551654531 0.218282227539 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0253274954343 0.0743258471296 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0364729266314 0.0701772020484 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0578991945744 0.128457276422 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0235643911504 0.0628817314937 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.3799401198 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 98.500998004 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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