SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's original headquarters. Moreover, Middlesburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision.
The author argues that Supercrop made the best decision and cites a few reasons to back his claim.
Firstly, the author assumes that many homeowners moved to Corporateville just because Supercorp moved its headquarters there. This is a fallacy. There may be other reasons which account for this sudden surge, for instance, a sudden drop in housing prices in Corpoprateville may have tempted a lot of people to change their residence. There might also be issues with current standard of living in Middlesburg. If there is a lack of basic necessities like clean water supply and proper sanitation, families might not be willing to change their residence. If any of these circumstances prove to be true, the basis of the argument by the author fails.
Secondly, there are no details provide about the survey, if we are to believe the results. The demographic of survey-takers might not be the same as the people who have shifted to Corporateville. The author assumes that the same people who took the surveys also moved into Corporateville. If this proves to be false, the survey's results can't be taken to be reliable.
Thirdly, the author needs to give more insight into which taxes are lower in Corporateville. It might be the case that there is a progressive tax system in place and the taxes affect lower and middle class workers a lot and are beneficial only to high income households. The author assumes that the tax system is beneficial to individuals of the same income strata who are moving to Corporateville.
Also, moving to Corporateville might not be "the best decision" but only a better one suited to Supercorp and the company is only purporting it as a miracle move to give false hope to all the workers moving to Corporateville and potentially hide some crucial facts about the new city which are in favour of Middlesburg being a better place to live.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK. This survey is only about workers where to live, not about where to work.
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 319 350
No. of Characters: 1519 1500
No. of Different Words: 160 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.226 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.762 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.804 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 101 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 65 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 38 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.267 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.928 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.328 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.568 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.07 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 432, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...g in Middlesburg. If there is a lack of basic necessities like clean water supply and proper sani...
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Line 5, column 338, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...proves to be false, the surveys results cant be taken to be reliable. Thirdly, t...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1569.0 2260.96107784 69% => OK
No of words: 319.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91849529781 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94913526428 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504702194357 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.4564302126 57.8364921388 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.6 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2666666667 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73333333333 5.70786347227 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154308944306 0.218282227539 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0508436580523 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0736680019012 0.0701772020484 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0790073023624 0.128457276422 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0632423070805 0.0628817314937 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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