In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating, and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is, therefore, sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities.
The given argument does contain quite a few logical fallacies and I would like to enumerate those by posing definitive questions that is likely tp weaken the argument. In this same process, I would be providing answers for the same to make it look comprehensive and logical.
Firstly, the mention about water sports and how Manson City residents rank it as their favorite recreational activity does not give us a clear explanation the use of river for water sports is sure to increase. To start with, it was just a survey and there is no mention about the people's participation in this survey. If most of the people who ranked water sports higher are from the working class, then it is not given in writing anywhere those same people will utilize the clean river for recreational activities. They might get to spend way less time compared to the youth population and we don't know how accurate the survey was too! Adding to the same, the river was rarely used for such activities, which was not being maintained for a major period of time. So, even when the government plans to clean up the river and use the river for water sports, it is highly unlikely that people will turn up in large numbers regularly.
Secondly, the city's government did not bat an eye about the maintenance of river quality and keeping it clean for a very long time. And like stated in the paragraph, it was not until recently that the state had announced plans to clean up Mason river. Putting these two together, it definitely is not a guarantee that the river will be used for water sports to a large extent. Just after cleaning the river fully, the government would like to garner revenue by increasing tourism or by some other means, try to monetize the clean up act. A common argument here could be that of the introduction of recreational activities for the same reason - monetary benefit. But, I'd like to pose the question here - Right when you clean up your city's river after years of people's decry, would it be wise to think that the state would let public use the river and spoil it already? This also stems from the fact that once such activities start, the government would have to spend more money than normal for the maintenance of the river.
Finally, the last sentence is completely flawed in my opinion. The devotion of money should be majorly focused on the clean-up of the river rather than spending it on keeping the recreational activities up and running. The health of the river is vital for sustaining the ecosystem of any given place; lesser the importance given to such quintessential factors, the biosystem is surely in danger.
Hence, I have spotted a numerous logical fallacies and presented them out in a elaborate manner. Till the given argument answers the posed questions in a convincing manner, it will remain a wafer-thin proposal by the city's government and will need more explanation.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 507 350
No. of Characters: 2350 1500
No. of Different Words: 247 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.745 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.635 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.508 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 143 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.35 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.916 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.315 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.534 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 281, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...urvey and there is no mention about the peoples participation in this survey. If most o...
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Line 3, column 595, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...compared to the youth population and we dont know how accurate the survey was too! A...
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Line 3, column 748, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ch was not being maintained for a major period of time. So, even when the government plans to ...
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Line 5, column 668, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'd
...he same reason - monetary benefit. But, Id like to pose the question here - Right ...
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Line 9, column 75, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a elaborate manner" with adverb for "elaborate"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ogical fallacies and presented them out in a elaborate manner. Till the given argument answers the po...
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Line 9, column 78, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...cal fallacies and presented them out in a elaborate manner. Till the given argume...
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Line 9, column 150, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a convincing manner" with adverb for "convincing"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...en argument answers the posed questions in a convincing manner, it will remain a wafer-thin proposal b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, as to, in my opinion, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2404.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 505.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7603960396 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56667599581 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 204.123752495 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50099009901 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 761.4 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.007491178 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.526315789 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5789473684 23.324526521 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.10526315789 5.70786347227 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238558663328 0.218282227539 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0739955055318 0.0743258471296 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0714712595728 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110884579664 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0869540447426 0.0628817314937 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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