In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating, and fish -
ing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through
the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department
devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years
there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river’s water
and the river’s smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean
up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is, therefore, sure to increase. The
city government should for that reason devote more money in this year’s budget to
riverside recreational facilities
The problem with the arguement is the assumption that if the Mason River were
cleaned up, that people would use it for water sports and recreation. This is not
necessarily true, as people may rank water sports among their favorite recreational
activities, but that does not mean that those same people have the financial ability,
time or equipment to pursue those interests.
However, even if the writer of the arguement is correct in assuming that the Mason
River will be used more by the city’s residents, the arguement does not say why the
recreational facilities need more money. If recreational facilities already exist along the
Mason River, why should the city allot more money to fund them? If the recreational
facilities already in existence will be used more in the coming years, then they will be
making more money for themselves, eliminating the need for the city government to
devote more money to them.
According to the arguement, the reason people are not using the Mason River for
water sports is because of the smell and the quality of water, not because the
recreational facilities are unacceptable.
If the city government alloted more money to the recreational facilities, then the
budget is being cut from some other important city project. Also, if the assumptions
proved unwarranted, and more people did not use the river for recreation, then much
money has been wasted, not only the money for the recreational facilities, but also the
money that was used to clean up the river to attract more people in the first place.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 260 350
No. of Characters: 1257 1500
No. of Different Words: 121 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.016 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.835 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.587 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 71 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 51 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 38 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 10.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.616 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.31 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.896 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.076 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 20 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Cleaned
...sumption that if the Mason River were cleaned up, that people would use it for water ...
^^^^^^^
Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Recreational
...s, the arguement does not say why the recreational facilities need more money. If recreati...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 15, column 42, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ecreational facilities need more money. If recreational facilities already exist a...
^^
Line 17, column 65, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...the city allot more money to fund them? If the recreational facilities already i...
^^
Line 23, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Devote
...g the need for the city government to devote more money to them. According to the ...
^^^^^^
Line 29, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Recreational
...the quality of water, not because the recreational facilities are unacceptable. If the c...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 33, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Budget
...the recreational facilities, then the budget is being cut from some other important ...
^^^^^^
Line 39, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Money
...recreational facilities, but also the money that was used to clean up the river to ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, then, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 55.5748502994 40% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1344.0 2260.96107784 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 260.0 441.139720559 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16923076923 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71488064619 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 204.123752495 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484615384615 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 705.55239521 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 19.7664670659 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.5379327248 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.0 119.503703932 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.5 23.324526521 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.70786347227 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 20.0 5.15768463074 388% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271894351697 0.218282227539 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145633557419 0.0743258471296 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0340030831853 0.0701772020484 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.091136214491 0.128457276422 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0616020376842 0.0628817314937 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 14.3799401198 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 48.3550499002 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.3 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 98.500998004 46% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 12.3882235529 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.9071856287 168% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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