In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is therefore sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities.
The city government of mason city has planned to clean up mason river and devote more money in the budget to riverside recreational facilities. The city government came up with this recommendation as residents of mason city rank water sports like swimming, fishing, and boating as their favorite recreational activities. Since for years there have been complaints from residents about contamination and false smell from river, it has affected recreational activities. However, before this recommendation can be properly evaluated three-question must be answered.
First of all, how are recreational activities such as swimming, boating, fishing, etc related to the river? it is possible that residents of mason city are well trained in water activities under proper guidance. Not necessarily because of mason river flowing through their city they rank in water sports. Further in prompt its also mentioned that mason river flowing through the city is rarely used for pursuits of water sports. if either of these scenarios has merit then the conclusion argument is significantly weekend.
secondly, how is the contamination of river linked to an increase in recreational activities? the conclusion states that the government is planning to clean the river in order to increase the recreational activities, where it is possible that these both are independent issues. Firstly the river can be contaminated by daily household activities like washing, bathing of wild animals, throwing wastes, etc due to which false odor is generated. secondly, the reason for the decrease in recreational activities maybe lack of interest, health issues, the dearth of proper guidance, etc. if the above is true then the argument does not hold any water.
In conclusion, the argument as it stands now is considerably flawed due to its reliance on unwarranted assumptions. if the government is able to answer above mentioned questions with more evidence (perhaps in the form of systematic research) then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of proposed recommendation of planning the river and devote more money to increase riverside recreational activities in mason city
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 337 350
No. of Characters: 1793 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.285 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.32 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.99 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 126 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.7 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.39 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.451 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.678 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.139 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 109, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...ing, fishing, etc related to the river? it is possible that residents of mason cit...
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Line 5, column 430, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...rely used for pursuits of water sports. if either of these scenarios has merit the...
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Line 5, column 430, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rely used for pursuits of water sports. if either of these scenarios has merit the...
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Line 5, column 515, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'weekended'.
Suggestion: weekended
...he conclusion argument is significantly weekend. secondly, how is the contaminatio...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Secondly
...argument is significantly weekend. secondly, how is the contamination of river link...
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Line 9, column 95, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...an increase in recreational activities? the conclusion states that the government i...
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Line 9, column 445, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Secondly
...c due to which false odor is generated. secondly, the reason for the decrease in recreat...
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Line 13, column 117, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...ts reliance on unwarranted assumptions. if the government is able to answer above ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1843.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 337.0 441.139720559 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46884272997 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07369415114 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501483679525 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2604157023 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.1875 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0625 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.875 5.70786347227 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.414151864626 0.218282227539 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140276448252 0.0743258471296 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138166570826 0.0701772020484 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256396716416 0.128457276422 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.15608730709 0.0628817314937 248% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.5979740519 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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