In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river's water and the river's smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is therefore sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In the passage, the author says that Mason city government should devote more money in this year's budget to riverside recreational facilities for the Mason River is rarely used for water sports.
He assumes that the problem of the river's water and smell can be totally solved once they allocate the budget to improve. It's likely that there are many factories located along the riverside emitting lots of polluted substance regularly, and these toxic substances sometimes even emit the odoriferous smell, harmful to the residents' breath system. Even though the government go all out to solve the problem as much as it can, it's possible that the problem may be unsolved until it decides to legislate the ordinance and enforced it strictly with the high penalty. On the other hand, it's also likely that the smell is resulted from many decades of sediments accumulating at the bottom of the river, which cannot be cleared in ten years. In this situation, although the government has enough budget to eradicate the smell, it still cannot solve the problem in a short time.
He also assumes that the sequence of their favorite sports represent that they would really participate in these activities if the river is clear and the riverside recreational facilities are improved. It's likely that most of the residents live far away from Mason River, and they may prefer some land sports or even stay home to these water sports they chose. It's also likely that they can go swimming at the gym or the sports center, so they don't have to spend time commuting to the riverside only for swimming.
The author mentions that there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river's water and smell. However, he directly contributes these two reason to why the river is rarely used for these water sports. It's possible that these two reasons indeed are part of the reasons residents aren't willing to play sports in the river. However, it's likely that there are also other reasons for them not choosing exercising in the river. Perhaps these unknown reasons are more solvable to the government and it's rather low-cost compared with the expense of improving riverside recreational facilities. On the other hand, he also makes an assumption that rare use of the facilities means that they have to be improved. It's possible that the equipment is good enough, but the problem is that few people go to use them.
To sum up, before persuading the government to devote more money in this year's budget to riversides recreational facilities,the author should provide more concrete reasons with the officers to successfully convince them.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 444 350
No. of Characters: 2163 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.59 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.872 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.451 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 149 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.118 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.388 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.362 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.567 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.161 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 88, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... government should devote more money in this years budget to riverside recreational ...
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Line 2, column 324, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'residents'' or 'resident's'?
Suggestion: residents'; resident's
...t the odoriferous smell, harmful to the residents breath system. Even though the governme...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 444, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...t the gym or the sports center, so they dont have to spend time commuting to the riv...
^^^^
Line 4, column 300, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
...ndeed are part of the reasons residents arent willing to play sports in the river. Ho...
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Line 4, column 368, Rule ID: ALSO_OTHER[1]
Message: Use simply 'there are other' or 'there are also'
Suggestion: there are other; there are also
... in the river. However, its likely that there are also other reasons for them not choosing exercisin...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 419, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to exercise'.
Suggestion: to exercise
...lso other reasons for them not choosing exercising in the river. Perhaps these unknown rea...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 676, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'facilities'' or 'facility's'?
Suggestion: facilities'; facility's
...akes an assumption that rare use of the facilities means that they have to be improved. It...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 124, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...et to riversides recreational facilities,the author should provide more concrete rea...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, really, so, still, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 28.8173652695 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2191.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 441.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96825396825 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51746844656 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462585034014 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 699.3 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 4.96107784431 262% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.0320553247 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.882352941 119.503703932 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9411764706 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47058823529 5.70786347227 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214614206684 0.218282227539 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0765912329939 0.0743258471296 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0771423265724 0.0701772020484 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138750268253 0.128457276422 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10281994293 0.0628817314937 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4 Out of 6
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