When Stanley Park first opened, it was the largest, most heavily used public park in town. It is still the largest park, but it is no longer heavily used. Video cameras mounted in the park's parking lots last month revealed the park's drop in popularity: the recordings showed an average of only 50 cars per day. In contrast, tiny Carlton Park in the heart of the business district is visited by more than 150 people on a typical weekday. An obvious difference is that Carlton Park, unlike Stanley Park, provides ample seating. Thus, if Stanley Park is ever to be as popular with our citizens as Carlton Park, the town will obviously need to provide more benches, thereby converting some of the unused open areas into spaces suitable for socializing.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In this article, the author suggests that Stanley Park should provide more benches to be as popular with the citizens by converting some of the unused open areas into spaces suitable for socializing.
He assumes that the number of cars parking in the Stanley Park is equivalent to that of visitors. However, it’s possible that there are more than one people sitting at the car, so the visitors must outnumber 50. What’s more, it’s also possible that many people consider the park an exercised field, so they may go there on foot or riding a bike rather than drive a car. Even though the park’s drop in reality, he cannot use the amount of cars to represent the circumstances, on the contrary, he can choose that of visitors staying at the park over the certain period of time as a valid indication.
He also makes an assumption that more than 150 people indicates that they really use the facilities at the park. From the passage, we know that the rather small Carlton Park is located in the heart of the business district. Hence, it’s reasonable to say that most of the people calculated only regard the park as one of the locations during their road to the office. The author should provide readers with the data of weekends to ensure that the purpose of Carlton Park isn’t only for one of the must-go locations for employees.
The author mentions that the Carlton Park provides ample seating for citizens, and assumes that it’s one of the advantages for the park. Nevertheless, he doesn’t provide any statistic numbers to show that it’s indeed the incentive for the citizens to choose this park rather than other parks nearby. It’s likely that people working in the business center often chat with others but never sit on the benches owing to the tight schedule. Hence, ample available seats don’t impact the willingness to go the park of visitors. In other words, the location plays more important role in peoples’ choice.
At the end of the article, the author recommends that the Stanley Park can also set more benches at the park to keep popular. Nevertheless, the location between two parks may be different. In addition, the age section of the visitors and the requirement for the park might not be same. Consequently, before recommending to provide more benches, the author has to make more careful consideration and more concrete data.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not exactly
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 408 350
No. of Characters: 1897 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.494 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.65 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.404 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.483 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.722 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.359 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.558 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.145 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...popular with the citizens by converting some of the unused open areas into spaces suitable ...
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Line 3, column 581, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...rs staying at the park over the certain period of time as a valid indication. He also makes...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 308, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommending providing'.
Suggestion: recommending providing
...might not be same. Consequently, before recommending to provide more benches, the author has to make mo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, as to, in addition, in other words, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.6327345309 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2016.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 405.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97777777778 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65516036111 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491358024691 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1363527399 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05555555556 5.70786347227 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352705265387 0.218282227539 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144819262674 0.0743258471296 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0823451281823 0.0701772020484 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220416044229 0.128457276422 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0645755742078 0.0628817314937 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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