The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
In my opinion, a sense of cooperation for a society to prepare its young people for leadership is important. However, a sense of competition is also crucial for the following reasons.
The idea of election has been ingrained in people's heart since hundred years ago, and most of the countries are democratic now, giving every citizen a ballot to choose his own ideal candidate. However, if young people only know how to cooperate with others, how can they be more attractive during the fierce competition? Without the concept of competition, even though they're really the excellent leaders, it's likely they may fail to get to the position because of the paucity of competition. It's obvious sometimes we may perform better than usual for we don't like the feeling of lose.
In industry, or other fields, a sense of cooperation and a sense of competition are both important. Take academic fields for example, professors' promotion in Taiwan requires high teaching quality, a certain amount of published articles, and so on. When the supervisors evaluate the performance, deciding which professor can be elevated, the performances of every professor are compared. However, when they try to do a research ranging some unfamiliar fields and conduct an experiment with other professors, which may be their skill, the professor has to cooperate with others to accomplish a case. Hence, before getting the highest of the position in the field, the professor has to equip with not only a sense of cooperation but competition.
Some may argue that too much competition may pose derivative problems. It's true that excessive competition is likely to make someone lose great opportunities in their lifetime. Imagine that a basketful player never pass the ball to his teammates, and he doesn't want to trust them that they can score. Even though he's able to get 80 scores in a game, it's unlikely that the coach and the fans will respect him.
To sum up, no matter which fields in a society, when it prepares its young people for leadership, a sense of cooperation and a sense of competition are both important. Nevertheless, too much may get the inverse effect.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, as to, for example, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1795.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 358.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01396648045 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8524531873 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553072625698 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4575505489 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.588235294 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0588235294 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23529411765 5.21951772744 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242144719705 0.243740707755 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805539538292 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0903385465833 0.0758088955206 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161008621383 0.150359130593 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0954982600245 0.0667264976115 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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