In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports like swimming boating and fishing among their favourite recreational activities . The Mason River flowing through the cityis rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river’s water and the river’s smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason river. Use of the river for water sports is, therefore, sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year’s budget to riverside recreational facilities.
The author of this proposal to increase the amount of money allocated in the coming year’s budget to riverside recreational facilities does not explain a cogent case to consider.
One of the factors considered is to what extent we can rely on the conducted surveys. Surveys do not always give with quality results. It depends on amount of people who responded to the survey and the coverage as to whether all residents of the state participated or only those living along the river. People near the riverside maybe more biased and would respond positively for water sports which may not be the case otherwise.
The author mentions that the city park department invests a part of the budget for maintenance of riverside recreational activities. However, there are complaints from few citizens regarding the quality of the water and smell of the river. This implies poor maintenance level. Proper use of the sanctioned amount should be ensured before taking up the proposal for increasing the portion of the budget for water sports. We also need to consider the number of received complaints. What if more complaints are received from few people indicating not all residents would want the proposal to be accepted.
The assumption of increase in water sports activity after cleanup drive of the river should be reconsidered. If people rank water sports to be their favourite recreational activity does not mean they have to use water sports, some people like to watch the game being played as well.
Considering all above factors, the author's argument does not justify the increase in the state government’s budget to riverside recreational facilities.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 270 350
No. of Characters: 1361 1500
No. of Different Words: 147 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.054 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.041 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.684 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 105 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 71 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.286 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.61 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.429 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.345 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.586 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.076 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 213, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...esponded to the survey and the coverage as to whether all residents of the state participated...
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Line 4, column 284, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to watch the game being played as well. Considering all above factors, the autho...
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Line 5, column 37, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... Considering all above factors, the authors argument does not justify the increase ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, regarding, so, well, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 28.8173652695 31% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1400.0 2260.96107784 62% => OK
No of words: 270.0 441.139720559 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18518518519 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83099879615 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548148148148 0.468620217663 117% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.0786727255 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2857142857 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57142857143 5.70786347227 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191637182168 0.218282227539 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0613489458788 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575009845474 0.0701772020484 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0932937773429 0.128457276422 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0689015053365 0.0628817314937 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 98.500998004 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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