"Techcorporation is our top pick for investment this term. We urge all of our clients to invest in this new company. For the first time in ten years, a company that has developed satellite technology has been approved by the FTA to compete with the current satellite provider. That company is Techcorporation. A consumer survey last year indicated that over eighty percent of respondents were dissatisfied with the current satellite television provider and would want to switch to another provider if the industry were not a monopoly. Thus, the new venture of Techcorporation into satellite television will prove to be highly profitable for those who invest now."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the advice and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the advice.
The newsletter offers advice to the investors stating Techcorporation is the top pick for investment, urging all the clients to invest in the new company. This argument is supported by the statistics that majority of respondents were dissatisfied with the current satellite television provider and would want to switch to another provider if the industry were not a monopoly. Any new company that emerges as a competitor to the existing services seems quite convincing. People tend to invest heavily at times in these type of investments. This could help the investors as well as the promoters of the company who are looking to cash in, so that the newcomer gets a stronghold of the market. However many times investing without having any knowledge or checking the given biodata of the company could be disastrous.
The newsletter urges the investors to invest into the new Techcorporation since the supporting survey claims that majority of respondents were dissatisfied with the current satellite television provider. If this data is to be considered true, then the newcomer in satellite television providers competition could be the ideal competitor, and certainly would be the ideal option for investors. However, if the claim is fallacious then it could be a debacle for the investors. The extent of the survey is not specified meaning only the area where people were not satisfied with the services were considered, or only a small proportion of the population was taken into account. The article fails to substantiate with proper statistics that could be relied upon.
The article states that for the first time in ten years, a company that has developed satellite technology has been approved by the FTA to compete with the current satellite provider if considered true could be revolutionary in the competition of television providers. But, if the approval of FTA is faulty based, the investors seem to be led by deception. The extent of FTA's involvement in processing the information is not provided which does not completely support the leading argument.
In conclusion, the article offering the investors an opportunity to invest in a new competitor for the satellite television providers seems to be plausible to a certain extent. The article fails to provide evidence and data that can be relied upon. The assumption that new venture of Techcorporation satellite television will prove to be highly profitable for those who invest now does not substantiate with arguments that lead to the above conclusion of the article.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 692, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...wcomer gets a stronghold of the market. However many times investing without having any...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...tatistics that could be relied upon. The article states that for the first time ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, so, then, well, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2137.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 409.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22493887531 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02924809087 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462102689487 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.0043827696 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.705882353 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0588235294 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.23529411765 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307020713555 0.218282227539 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0999195497605 0.0743258471296 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0869278171585 0.0701772020484 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203611013622 0.128457276422 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0680201640436 0.0628817314937 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 692, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...wcomer gets a stronghold of the market. However many times investing without having any...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...tatistics that could be relied upon. The article states that for the first time ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, so, then, well, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2137.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 409.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22493887531 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02924809087 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462102689487 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.0043827696 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.705882353 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0588235294 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.23529411765 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307020713555 0.218282227539 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0999195497605 0.0743258471296 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0869278171585 0.0701772020484 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203611013622 0.128457276422 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0680201640436 0.0628817314937 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.