There is now evidence that the relaxed pace of life in small towns promotes better health and greater longevity than does the hectic pace of life in big cities. Businesses in the small town of Leeville report fewer days of sick leave taken by individual w

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There is now evidence that the relaxed pace of life in small towns promotes better health and greater longevity than does the hectic pace of life in big cities. Businesses in the small town of Leeville report fewer days of sick leave taken by individual workers than do businesses in the nearby large city of Masonton. Furthermore, Leeville has only one physician for its one thousand residents, but in Masonton the proportion of physicians to residents is five times as high. Finally, the average age of Leeville residents is significantly higher than that of Masonton residents. These findings suggest that the relaxed pace of life in Leeville allows residents to live longer, healthier lives.

Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.

In this passage, we are informed that relaxed pace of life in small towns promote better health and great longevity than that of big cities. Referring to distinction between Leeville and Masonton about business sick leave, physician number and average age, the author ascribes longer and healthier lives in Leeville to relaxed pace of life. Quite reasonable though such explanation appears at first glance, we cannot safely claim that it is the unique one that accounts for the facts presented in the argument. Thus, we need to consider more explanations, which could rival with the one presented in the argument.

To start off, the author attributes less sick leave to Leeville's better health status than Masonton. While less sick happening might be one possible reason for sick leave, the latter could have sprung from other reasons as well. First of all, it is likely that factories in Leeville have more strict management team and even don't allow the employees to apply for leave request. If this is the case, less sick leave request could have little bearing on employee's average health status. Consequently, it could be explained as stemming from the bitterly strict regulation from business. Second, while people's healthy status could reflect in the leave request frequency, the less frequency of sick leave could not be exclusively attributable to their healthy status. Instead, it is of equal probability that the employees in the Leeville are actually quite assiduous and hard-working categories, which drive them to work more and seldom apply for leave even with malaise.

Furthermore, the less physcian percentage in Leeville could lend great support to the author's explanation that less doctor requirement there as their fewer patients number. However, such phenomenon could be considered not only from disease frequency, but also presumably from other explanations as well. One possible reason is that physicians don't like to live in Leeville, as they would like to enjoy more convenient traffic in Masonton. Another explanation might be that the less physicians percentage heavily depends on the total population, and Leevilles really possesses much less population number compared with Masonton. Without additional investigation we can not decide which explanation could finally lead to the ratio of physicians to residents. It is even likely that all of these aforementioned reasons have conspired to it.

Last but not least, while we can admit for a moment that all of above cases are caused out of healthier status and less sick happening in Leeville, it is reckless to claim that the significantly higher average age of Leeville residents attributes to relaxed pace of life. Other reasons could also compete with the one alleged in the argument. While residents in Leeville have longer ages than that of Masonton, majority of elder residents have suffered chronic disease and really live in a bad healthy situation. Their longevity actually represents their pain and suffering, instead of a kind of healthier lives.

In summary, while the relatively less pressure life have exerted great influence on people's longevity and health, in the absence of sufficient information, we can not establish a casual relationship between it and overall health status for different cities. The human being's average healthy status in different cities is such a case that we should consider more explanations which could account for the facts presented in the argument.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, really, second, so, thus, well, while, in summary, kind of, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 55.5748502994 131% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2947.0 2260.96107784 130% => OK
No of words: 552.0 441.139720559 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33876811594 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84713113593 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71747765563 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 204.123752495 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.445652173913 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 913.5 705.55239521 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.3292128396 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.130434783 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47826086957 5.70786347227 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178948790729 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0599611845549 0.0743258471296 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10250798633 0.0701772020484 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115026429748 0.128457276422 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0907799962173 0.0628817314937 144% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.3799401198 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 98.500998004 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 554 350
No. of Characters: 2873 1500
No. of Different Words: 239 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.852 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.186 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.666 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 213 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 164 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 118 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 77 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.087 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.392 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.739 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.326 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.515 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.129 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5