Three years ago, because of flooding at the Western Palean Wildlife Preserve, 100 lions and 100 western gazelles were moved to the East Palean Preserve, an area that is home to most of the same species that are found in the western preserve, though in larger numbers, and to the eastern gazelle, a close relative of the western gazelle. The only difference in climate is that the eastern preserve typically has slightly less rainfall. Unfortunately, after three years in the eastern preserve, the imported western gazelle population has been virtually eliminated. Since the slight reduction in rainfall cannot be the cause of the virtual elimination of western gazelle, their disappearance must have been caused by the larger number of predators in the eastern preserve.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The prompt supports the idea that the decrement in the number of western gazelle is caused by the larger number of predators in the eastern Palean Preserve, not for the loos of rainfall. Although the author provided certain points in his proposition, there are sufficient logical flaws in the premises of the argument. Those assumptions are here to mentioned followed by necessary clarification.
To begin with - the author conjectured that the western gazella will not need enugh rainfall to survive and that they are well equipped to last even in a small shortage of rainfall. Wat if the idea of the author might not true? What if water is probably the most significant element in the lives of western gazella? Even if his reasoning is assumed to be true; slight reduction of rain might no do that much harm to the gazella species (western), even though it remains susceptable to question. Slight shortage of rainfall for one week can be regarded. Even for one or two months of reduced rainfall might stand the gazelles out there, providing that they are immune enough to this shortage of rain. But what about three years? An animal which, in the given circumstenses, are needy for water, can survive with three years of reduced rainfall? Most probable ans is "NO". The western gezelle may not withstand such a long strait of reduced rain, which may seem little to the author, but might not be so to the western gazelle's unfortunately.
Another point to make here is that - the author made an analogoy of the western gazelle with their relative species, eastern gazelle. By providing this, he tried to state that - as the easter ones have been well enough in the slight change of rainfall, then their close ones - the wester gazelles should make it through. However, does it authentic enough to judge one specie's habitation or character based on the others' - even if they are closely relaterd to each other? It can be true that both the gazelles are close to each other regarding their characterstics or behaviour. What if they are not so same in their habitation or in their need to struggle? What if the eastern gazella maintain different lifestyle than those of the western ones? It might be the case that the western one needs higher concentration of water compared to the eastern one. Even if we take for granted that - both the species require similar amount of rain water to survive, but does it guarantee that both of them have similar adaptibility? Can't it be the case that - the western gazelle are more suscepable to the scarcity of water than to the eastern ones, even at the least level? It can be. And if it is true then the conjecture of the author might not hold truth.
Thirdly, the author mentioned about the larger number of predators in the Eastern Palaen Preserve, that these predators might be the prime reasons behind the reduction in the number of the western gazelle. It can be, nevertheless, it might not be. There is no specific evidence about the increase of predators in the prompt. Might it be lions or the other ones. There is also no specific evidence of any other animals that could be the predator of the gazelle. Another prospect is that - even increment in the number of predators are actually causing the western gazelle to be eliminated, lets assumed, then why it not true for the eastern gazelles? Perhaps the predators might not be interested in the eastern gazelle. So, much of the relavent evidences are needed to solidify the assumption.
So, looking at all the proponents and factors mentined above, it can be said that - it would be too hasty to come to any conclusion before answering the questions asked in the essays - without providing enough pertinent evidences for the convinience of the conclusion.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 19 2
No. of Sentences: 33 15
No. of Words: 646 350
No. of Characters: 3024 1500
No. of Different Words: 264 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.041 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.681 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.488 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 210 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 166 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 101 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.576 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.159 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.576 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.277 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.425 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.076 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 1022, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: Can't; Cannot
...both of them have similar adaptibility? Cant it be the case that - the western gazel...
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Line 6, column 1030, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...them have similar adaptibility? Cant it be the case that - the western gazelle are...
^^
Line 8, column 620, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'trues'?
Suggestion: trues
...iminated, lets assumed, then why it not true for the eastern gazelles? Perhaps the p...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, regarding, so, then, third, thirdly, well, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 37.0 19.6327345309 188% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.9520958084 185% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 28.8173652695 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 88.0 55.5748502994 158% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3120.0 2260.96107784 138% => OK
No of words: 645.0 441.139720559 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83720930233 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.03952876749 4.56307096286 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61857920518 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 204.123752495 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.427906976744 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 972.9 705.55239521 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 19.7664670659 167% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 60.5280406905 57.8364921388 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.5454545455 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5454545455 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.84848484848 5.70786347227 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.67664670659 278% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143788049584 0.218282227539 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0411980562143 0.0743258471296 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0422843659775 0.0701772020484 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0805319821065 0.128457276422 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.043139309649 0.0628817314937 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.3799401198 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 98.500998004 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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