"The tufted groundhog lives in the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg. Ancient records suggest that the tufted groundhog once numbered in the millions- Since they were declared a wildlife sanctuary in 2004, development along the coastal wetlands has been prohibited. Now local development interests are lobbying for the West Lansburg council to allow an access road to-be built along the edge of wetlands. Neighboring Eastern Carpenteria: which had a similar sanctuary: has seen its sea otter population decline since the repeal of its sanctuary status in 1948. In order to preserve the regions biodiversity and ensure a healthy environment, the West Lansburg council should not allow the road to be built "
While it might be true that Eastern Carpenteria has seen sea otter population declined since sanctuary status is repealed but it can be because of multiple reason which are not accounted here and thus we can not say the building road will hinder the biodiversity and healthy environment.
The declination of sea otter can be from many reason like sea otter have migrated to some other location. They might have faced lack of resource and thus moved somewhere else. Building road and destroying biodiversity are completely unrelated and subjective things. In many cases we might find example where building can create problem but they can also provide many advantages which can help to protect it too. Example building road can give give people more easy access to places where people can hardly reach thus this can increase people interest in tufted groundhog and could serve in benefit of situation.
Building road will increase revenue which can be used to protect biodiversity . Authority can spread more awareness to large no of diverse people which was previously endemic. Authority can provide better facility to tufted groundhog to increase there population. Building road provide easy access hence, scientist can come to that place to do there research which will be beneficial in maintaining healthy environment and biodiversity. Also if any disease may come which effects tufted groundhog then these research will help to eliminate that.
Example Kevin Richardson who runs a sanctuary which helps lion, hyena etc uses builds road and uses that to provide better access to tourist from which he generates revenue also for scientist to do there research of animal habitat. building road can give several benefit which can be used to protect biodiversity and to ensure healthy environment but its up to us that how we use or misuse them.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
The essay is out of topic. This is not an issue essay but an argument essay.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 301 350
No. of Characters: 1525 1500
No. of Different Words: 157 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.165 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.066 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.55 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 109 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 84 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.083 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.879 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.428 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.596 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.158 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 106, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...r have migrated to some other location. they might have faced lack of resource and t...
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Line 2, column 160, Rule ID: SOME_WHERE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'somewhere'?
Suggestion: somewhere
...e faced lack of resource and thus moved some where else. building road and destroying bio...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Building
...source and thus moved some where else. building road and destroying biodiversity are co...
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Line 3, column 145, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'create'
Suggestion: create
...e might find example where building can creates problem but they can also provide many ...
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Line 3, column 187, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun advantage seems to be countable; consider using: 'many advantages'.
Suggestion: many advantages
...eates problem but they can also provide many advantage which can help to protect it too. Exa...
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Line 3, column 227, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...many advantage which can help to protect it too. Example building road can give ...
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Line 4, column 27, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: give
...ect it too. Example building road can give give people more easy access to places where...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Building
...d could serve in benefit of situation. building road will increase revenue which can be...
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Line 5, column 78, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...hich can be used to protect biodiversity . Authority can spread more awareness to...
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Line 6, column 46, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...rity can spread more awareness to large no of diverse people which was previously...
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Line 6, column 66, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... awareness to large no of diverse people which was previously endemic. Authority...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Building
...roundhog to increase there population. building road provide easy access hence, scienc...
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Line 8, column 34, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tion. building road provide easy access hence, sciencetist can come to that plac...
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Line 8, column 175, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...g healthy environment and biodiversity. also if any disease may come which effects t...
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Line 8, column 175, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: also,
...g healthy environment and biodiversity. also if any disease may come which effects t...
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Line 9, column 92, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... helps lion, hyenna etc uses builds road and uses that to provide better access t...
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Line 9, column 180, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ist from which he generates revenue also for scientist to do there research of an...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Building
...o do there research of animal habitat. building road can give several benefit which can...
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Line 10, column 24, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun benefit seems to be countable; consider using: 'several benefits'.
Suggestion: several benefits
...animal habitat. building road can give several benefit which can be used to protect biodiversi...
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Line 10, column 115, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ersity and to ensure healthy environment but its upto us that how we use or misus...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, then, thus, while, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.9520958084 185% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 55.5748502994 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1559.0 2260.96107784 69% => OK
No of words: 301.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17940199336 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57973372567 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521594684385 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.1814181666 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.923076923 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1538461538 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84615384615 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 10.0 5.15768463074 194% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 20.0 5.25449101796 381% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0535583567999 0.218282227539 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.027613371126 0.0743258471296 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0388578599612 0.0701772020484 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.030732475921 0.128457276422 24% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03742882651 0.0628817314937 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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