Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
Dr. Karp had studied Dr. Field’s observation that the children of Tertia are reared by the village instead of their biological parents. Therefore Dr. Karp had visited the Tertia along with the group of islands and his study concluded that Dr. Field observations were wrong. Therefore, Dr.Karp has recommended further study to get correct details on child-rearing in Tertia. However, before granting permission for further studies there are few questions that need to be answered.
Firstly, Is the lifestyle and culture of people in Tertia the same as 20 years ago? Aren't the children whom Dr. Field observed are adults now? Dr. Field had observed the culture in Tertia 20 years ago and Dr. Karp had carried his studies recently. There is a gap of two decades in their studies. The speed with which modernization is pacing their must be a huge cultural difference between the lives of people in Tertia then and now. Moreover, 20 years ago Tertia was an under-developed village island and now Tertia has developed into an urban city. The two studies should be compared on equal ground, where there is a gap of 20 years means there might be a lot of changes. If the above assumptions have merits then it may be difficult to have to grant further research.
Furthermore, Is the research approach the same to compare two theories? Can we compare two theories, one which is based on observation and the other based on interactive sessions? Dr.Filed's conclusion was based on an observation-centered approach, which means Dr. Field had just observed the lives of people and concluded that children are not reared by their parents. Dr. Field had analyzed only the half picture, he never interacted with the people of Tertia. It might also be the possibility that Tertia children are actually reared by their parents, just the population of Tertia look younger than their actual age. While, Dr, Karp has adapted interview- centered approach, what questions did Dr. Karp ask in an interview? Were the questions direct or indirect means were the children promptly asked who render them? There are insufficient details and also both approaches are different to decide whether further studies are required or not.
In conclusion, the above argument is flawed. It has a few unwarranted assumptions which need to be answered before deciding the arguments further scope. If the answers to the above questions are satisfactory then further studies to obtain accurate details on Tertian child-rearing might be taken into consideration.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 417 350
No. of Characters: 2061 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.519 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.942 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.745 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.13 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.472 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.565 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.305 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.305 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.104 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 137, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ge instead of their biological parents. Therefore Dr. Karp had visited the Tertia along w...
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Line 1, column 289, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Karp
... observations were wrong. Therefore, Dr.Karp has recommended further study to get co...
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Line 2, column 84, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: Aren't
...ple in Tertia the same as 20 years ago? Arent the children whom Dr. Field observed ar...
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Line 2, column 675, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... means there might be a lot of changes. If the above assumptions have merits then ...
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Line 3, column 183, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Fileds
...other based on interactive sessions? Dr.Fileds conclusion was based on an observation-...
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Line 4, column 153, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e deciding the arguments further scope. If the answers to the above questions are ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2110.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 414.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09661835749 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82224024921 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478260869565 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.7847281963 57.8364921388 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.7391304348 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21739130435 5.70786347227 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.67664670659 321% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406411570325 0.218282227539 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117444307022 0.0743258471296 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105032681745 0.0701772020484 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240194510255 0.128457276422 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116851820978 0.0628817314937 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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