Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures.
The Conclusion stated by Dr. Karp that the observation centred approach is invalid in studying cultures is based on the evidence that Dr. Karp's research proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about tertian culture is invalid. The author's argument is flawed and can not be evaluated unless some evidence is given to support or oppose the theory. This essay analyzes three pieces of evidence needed for the unbiased evaluation of the argument.
Firstly, the author lacks evidence which supports that his approach of studying cultures by interviewing them is effective enough. It could be the case that the children whom he interviewed were not telling the actual truth. Also it could be that this new method does not take into account the biases associated with people who are being interviewed. Evidence (preferably a scientific study) is required which shows the efficacy of this method. If the author fails to provide this evidence then it makes the argument weaker.
Secondly, the author does not gives any information about the sample size of both the methodologies. It could be the case that Dr Field's research takes a large sample size and Dr Karp's method takes only a few dozen interviews. This mismatch in scale of the research can cause the ambiguity in the result provided. Hence, there an evidence is required which compares both the methods. If author fails to provide this evidence then it makes the argument weaker
Lastly, the author did not gave any information about what was the time difference during which both studies were conducted. It can be the case that there was a transition in population of the tertian and has affected the research of Dr Karp. Again, an evidence should be provided which clearly states the time difference between the studies and also what changes occured in the population. If author fails to provide this evidence then it makes the argument weaker
In conclusion, there must be at least three evidence required to evaluate the argument. If the author fails to provide the evidence then it makes the argument flawed to its very core.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 226, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...n about tertian culture is invalid. The authors argument is flawed and can not be evalu...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...unbiased evaluation of the argument. Firstly, the author lacks evidence which...
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Line 3, column 237, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ewed were not telling the actual truth. Also it could be that this new method does n...
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Line 3, column 455, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...hich shows the efficacy of this method. If the author fails to provide this eviden...
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Line 5, column 32, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'give'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: give
...aker. Secondly, the author does not gives any information about the sample size o...
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Line 5, column 32, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'give'
Suggestion: give
...aker. Secondly, the author does not gives any information about the sample size o...
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Line 5, column 386, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...quired which compares both the methods. If author fails to provide this evidence t...
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Line 7, column 29, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'give'
Suggestion: give
...t weaker Lastly, the author did not gave any information about what was the time...
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Line 7, column 393, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...what changes occured in the population. If author fails to provide this evidence t...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ce then it makes the argument weaker In conclusion, there must be at least th...
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Line 9, column 99, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ence required to evaluate the argument. If the author fails to provide the evidenc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, then, at least, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 28.0 16.3942115768 171% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1742.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 347.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02017291066 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53875605945 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466858789625 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5618103918 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.470588235 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4117647059 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41176470588 5.70786347227 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0583061450727 0.218282227539 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0226469347723 0.0743258471296 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0278077722104 0.0701772020484 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0366919877035 0.128457276422 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0206129658381 0.0628817314937 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 226, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...n about tertian culture is invalid. The authors argument is flawed and can not be evalu...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...unbiased evaluation of the argument. Firstly, the author lacks evidence which...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 237, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ewed were not telling the actual truth. Also it could be that this new method does n...
^^^^
Line 3, column 455, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...hich shows the efficacy of this method. If the author fails to provide this eviden...
^^
Line 5, column 32, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'give'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: give
...aker. Secondly, the author does not gives any information about the sample size o...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 32, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'give'
Suggestion: give
...aker. Secondly, the author does not gives any information about the sample size o...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 386, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...quired which compares both the methods. If author fails to provide this evidence t...
^^
Line 7, column 29, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'give'
Suggestion: give
...t weaker Lastly, the author did not gave any information about what was the time...
^^^^
Line 7, column 393, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...what changes occured in the population. If author fails to provide this evidence t...
^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ce then it makes the argument weaker In conclusion, there must be at least th...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 99, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ence required to evaluate the argument. If the author fails to provide the evidenc...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, then, at least, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 28.0 16.3942115768 171% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1742.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 347.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02017291066 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53875605945 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466858789625 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5618103918 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.470588235 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4117647059 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41176470588 5.70786347227 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0583061450727 0.218282227539 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0226469347723 0.0743258471296 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0278077722104 0.0701772020484 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0366919877035 0.128457276422 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0206129658381 0.0628817314937 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.