Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.
Child rearing is in normal cases dealt by biological parents, however twenty years ago an anthropologist Dr. Field using an observation centered approach concluded the in the island of Tertia children were reared by an entire village. But this claim is later proved invalid by Fr. Karp who uses an interview centered method to study the child rearing culture. It was recommended by some anthropologist to obtain accurate information through interview centered methods. This recommendation is contignent upon several questions that must be answered to properly evaluate the validity of the argument.
#If the set was a correct representation
Dr. Karp undertakes an interview centered method however there's no mention about the set of people he has interviewed. Where the people he interviewed an accurate representation of the island of Tertia. It is also presented that "the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village" does this imply no adults were interviewed and the argument is totally determined on children. Even if children is considered, what age group was considered for the interview as younger children tend to stay at home which wouldn't be a correct representation.Were equal commensurate of people belonging from all sectors of the society included in this approach. It is neccessary to give some details regarding the sample set in the argument or an attachment of detailed report would be suggested.
Study by Dr. Field is 20 years old which isnt the right state of the art model to be compared with. Why are no recent reserach work being included. In case of no recent research work it is important to be documented in the argument about the same. The study by Dr.Field is proved invalid by Dr. Karp which seems unreasonable because the scenarios have changed in twenty years. People have evoluted, for instance every family used to be a joint family in 1980's in India, whereas in 2000's all the joint families shifted to nuclear family. Hence it is unjustified to declare Dr. Fields study as invalid.
Finally, some anthropologist claim to obtain accurate information by conduction further research using interview centered approach, but it isnt cjustified about how interview centered approach could result in accurate reports. The other anthropologists needs to suggest a list of approaches for a reserach to be conducted as interview based approach is sample or dataset dependent which is not the accurate criterion for judgement. A couple of factors which describes the inter-relations, for example how much invested are the other adults of the village could help us give a better idea.
In conclusion, despite the recommendation of further research on Tertian child rearing practices, the recommendation is based on the assumptions given is rife with unwarranted assumptions and open to questions stated above that must be answered satisfactorily to prove the plausibility of such presenments.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 479 350
No. of Characters: 2469 1500
No. of Different Words: 236 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.678 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.154 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.994 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 187 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 149 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 106 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.95 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.879 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.55 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.295 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.521 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.079 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1980s'.
Suggestion: in the 1980s
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Suggestion: Hence,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, however, if, regarding, so, whereas, for example, for instance, in conclusion, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.6327345309 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2536.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 476.0 441.139720559 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32773109244 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11019460817 2.78398813304 112% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 204.123752495 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508403361345 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 792.0 705.55239521 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.9833379457 57.8364921388 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.473684211 119.503703932 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0526315789 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26315789474 5.70786347227 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303074501683 0.218282227539 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0913363401281 0.0743258471296 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120858209942 0.0701772020484 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131024305004 0.128457276422 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130262536377 0.0628817314937 207% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.3550499002 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 98.500998004 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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