The given argument is a comparision between observation-centered approach to study cultures with interview-centered approach. The observational study was made twenty years ago on an island of Tertia. The interview approach has been made on the people of same village but in recent times. The observational study concludes that children of the village are reared by the entire village and not just by their biological parents, where as interview approach concludes that the children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than other adults of the village.
The argument on both sides in itself is rife with many holes and assumptions. For the observational approach it doesn't form a basis on which the conclusion was given. There is no accountability of the parameters that were taken into account while making the conclusions. There could be several factors which would have been taken into account such as children's behaviour towards each other or towards the parents and adults, their helping nature, how well they mingle with different age group people and last but not the least how divergent children of same age group behave in different situations. Each factor when taken individually or with a combination of others could lead an individual to conclude differently.
For the interview approach which is the most recent one, there is again no evidence on what questions were proposed to the children. There could be several factors on which questions could be asked such as, the questions could be more specific towards the children's parents, relatives or were they more personal rather than generalised questions, were the children questioned regarding schooling which would provide them with an opportunity to talk about their teacher and principal and thus other elders in the village.
Thus both the argument has its own sides of assumptions. Along with which both were performed two decades away which gives us the evidence that when Dr. Field, made his observational conclusions and when recent interview conclusions were made the children were certainly different. Both the studies were made in difference of time, which gives us the possibility in general cultural change in the village. Thus, in order to conclude whether the observational or interview approach is more appropriate the research has to be perforemed on same village and also on same children around the same time. Also as human nature is divergent, there can never be two humans who think exactly same way, thus either conclusion made would still be valid only on the particular village and cannot be just generalised until a very large scale research is performed on variety of villages.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 434 350
No. of Characters: 2230 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.564 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.138 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.83 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.125 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.632 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.339 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 201, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...wenty years ago on an island of Tertia. The interview approach has been made on the...
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Line 1, column 289, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...le of same village but in recent times. The observational study concludes that chil...
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Line 1, column 427, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whereas'?
Suggestion: whereas
...d not just by their biological parents, where as interview approach concludes that the c...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...nts than other adults of the village. The argument on both sides in itself is rif...
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Line 2, column 113, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ions. For the observational approach it doesnt form a basis on which the conclusion wa...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...and thus other elders in the village. Thus both the argument has its own sides of ...
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Line 4, column 600, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... on same children around the same time. Also as human nature is divergent, there can...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, regarding, so, still, thus, well, while, as to, in general, such as, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2264.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 433.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22863741339 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86971737336 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471131639723 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 707.4 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 99.2039998879 57.8364921388 172% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.5 119.503703932 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0625 23.324526521 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0625 5.70786347227 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272560793858 0.218282227539 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0922492377321 0.0743258471296 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833505098979 0.0701772020484 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1707228839 0.128457276422 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0986177036563 0.0628817314937 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.3799401198 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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