Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The passage talks about how children are reared on the island of Tertia .
Two studies were conducted one by Dr Field 20 years ago and another one recently by Dr. Karp. Their studies' point to disparate child rearing methodologies. It has been recommended by some anthropologists to conduct further interview-centered research to get accurate information . This recommendation is based on several assumptions and hence may not be completely valid.
Firstly , The two researhers have used different methods to investigate the child rearing methodology on Tertia island. One was through observation and the other was through conducting interviews. I believe that interview centered approach , though more personal can actually goad the interviewee to a certain direction. We need to be aware of the questions that have been asked. Assuming the children were asked only about their parents , it is natural for them to thus speak about them .“talking “ about their parents, which is vague. Children may also gives biased answers to validate the claim of the interviewer.Thus only interview based approach can lead to biased answer. A more detailed questionnaire , that dispassionately covers all the relationships , may get us closer to actual answer.
Secondly , we should consider the time which has elapsed between the two studies. Dr. Fields conducted research some twenty years ago. At that point in time children may have been reared by whole village as a joint family . There may have been a different social construct for the term 'family'. Thus he concluded that children were raised by the entire village rather than just the biological parents. While in the recent scenario , such practice may have been abandoned . Tertian People may have shifted to nuclear family setup .So the children from this young generation are more connected to their biological parents and have answered the questions about them . Hence both studies may hold significance .Implying both approaches can be used for future research .No specific benefits of interview based approach over observation based for this scenario has been mentioned.
Finally , Dr, fields studied only one island , Tertia , where as the recent study included other islands as well . It may also be possible that sample interviews conducted in Tertia were small . Thus it is possible that overall the practises prevalent in Tertia got generalized due to extrapolation from majority responses. This anomaly can occur easily if the population size at Tertia is small.How many people were questioned and what is the population of Tertia ? Some nanswered questions We should thus re-check the survey sample and process used to conduct these interviews.
The given passage mentions the two approaches used to find out the child rearing practice in tertia and their respective results . Though it has not been justified why the anthropologists' favor interview centered approach . The recommendation should be reconsidered taking into account the above mentioned arguments.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2553.0 2260.96107784 113% => OK
No of words: 469.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44349680171 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97937395002 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 204.123752495 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515991471215 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 782.1 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 19.7664670659 142% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.9599009697 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.1785714286 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.75 23.324526521 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42857142857 5.70786347227 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 37.0 5.25449101796 704% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 17.0 4.67664670659 364% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276808731637 0.218282227539 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0730349549659 0.0743258471296 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653383565532 0.0701772020484 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151382524844 0.128457276422 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0319889197286 0.0628817314937 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 98.500998004 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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