Anthropology deals with the study of human cultures, society and development and such a study was conducted by Dr.Field and Dr.Karp. However, their approaches applied to study the Tertian culture are different. A few other anthropologists have suggested that more accurate information can be obtained from the interview-centered method rather than a observation-centered methodology.
Firstly, observation-centered approach might seem more salutary because observations help us capture the minute details which can't be captured by interviewing a person. For instance, what if a few children are reserved and aren't comfortable in an interview? In such cases, the interview-based approach might give us erroneous results. It has also been proven in various studies that the human eye tends to look at the smallest details which goes unnoticed at other times. When observation can prove to be so helpful, the observation-centered approach might not produce completely bogus results. Answering the question if the children are social or not would strengthen the argument that interview-based approach is superior to the results obtained by Dr.Field's approach.
Secondly, Dr.Field conducted his studies in Tertia whereas Dr.Karp visited a group of islands which included Tertia. Providing more evidence like how did the children in Tertia respond to the interviews would consolidate the accuracy of the argument. To strengthen Dr.Karp's results, the argument would need to mention the responses of the children of Tertia. If their responses proved that they spoke about the other adults in the village rather than their biological parents, then Dr.Field's observations would be valid. Mentioning about the interview answers specifically pertaining to the children in Tertia would help to evaluate the recommendation.
Thirdly, the argument doesn't posit what are the questions asked in the interview based approach. Giving an insight about the questions asked would help us to analyse why the children spoke more about their biological parents. What if the responses of the children were that their parents don't spend enough time with them ? What if the answers had a negative tone to them? When the children talk about their biological parents, it doesn't imply that they mentioned that they were reared by them. Hence, the interview based approach would need to give examples of the responses to get rid of the blemishes in the argument. Answering these questions would help us to appraise the argument.
Thus, the argument has a few flaws and to get a better recommendation as to which method to follow to understand Tertian child-rearing practices, a few questions need to be answered .
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not exactly
argument 3 -- OK
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correct arguments:
https://www.testbig.com/story/gre-argument-essay-topic-21-outline
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 425 350
No. of Characters: 2225 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.54 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.235 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.148 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 136 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 99 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.318 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.48 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.591 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.324 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.535 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.162 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, thus, whereas, as to, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2277.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 415.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48674698795 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21183252502 2.78398813304 115% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489156626506 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 675.9 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1905254484 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.5 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8636363636 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72727272727 5.70786347227 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272679376829 0.218282227539 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0806983104601 0.0743258471296 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0603954567069 0.0701772020484 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151282160679 0.128457276422 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0842893972973 0.0628817314937 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.5979740519 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 98.500998004 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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