The Arctic regions are home to the Arctic deer. They have a peripatetic nature to meet their needs for survival, which is food. The author claims this to be an age-old pattern imputing it to the migratory pattern passed on from one generation of the Arctic deers to the next and so on. It doesn't take long for the author to come to a conclusion after receiving the reports from the local hunters that the global warming would help validate the report that global warming trends have impeded the migratory patterns over the frozen ice. Although, global warming might be one of the reasons accounting for the meager population of the deer, it isn't the only one. The argument is inherently flawed.
First of all, the deterioration of the deer population might be traced to several possibilities ranging from extreme climatic conditions taking a toll on the survival of the deer to the scarcity it's food. The argument gives an abstruse view of the climatic conditions the population of deer inhabits in. Studying in detail about the climatic conditions prevalent in the Artic regions a few years back when there was a steady population would give a brief overview which would indirectly suggest the optimal conditions for their survival. The deer might not be adapted to survive in such biting weather which is reflected in their population reduction. A higher mortality rate and a low reproductive rate could be the reason explaining the depletion in the population.
Furthermore, elaborating on the reasons for decline, the local hunters could be guilty of killing the Arctic deer. There could be a plethora of reasons to validate the point mentioned above. For instance, the Arctic deer's skin might be tantamount to a huge sum of money due to which the local hunters resort to hunting them. The decline could be attributed to the poaching of Arctic deer by the so called 'reporters' of the decline.
Regarding the reports produced by the local hunters, who might be the victims themselves, before naively considering these reports as valid, a few officials should conduct a survey comparing the populations.
The reports produced by the hunters might be bogus and to be absolutely certain and refute the fact that the reports are portraying the truth prevailing in the Arctic regions, government organizations must conduct a survey.
Therefore, it is naive of us to attribute or assume global warming is the only issue which can correlate the extinction. The argument has a few voids,which can be filled with the right evidence as mentioned above to strengthen the author's point of view.
Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 436 350
No. of Characters: 2118 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.57 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.858 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.665 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 119 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.947 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.817 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.368 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.318 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.557 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.103 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 290, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... Arctic deers to the next and so on. It doesnt take long for the author to come to a c...
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Line 1, column 642, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...r the meager population of the deer, it isnt the only one. The argument is inherentl...
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Line 3, column 117, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...veral possibilities ranging from extreme climatic conditions taking a toll on the...
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Line 3, column 200, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...survival of the deer to the scarcity its food. The argument gives an abstruse vi...
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Line 3, column 229, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...carcity its food. The argument gives an abstruse view of the climatic conditions...
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Line 5, column 405, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...poaching of Arctic deer by the so called reporters of the decline. Regarding t...
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Line 8, column 136, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...fact that the reports are portraying the truth prevailing in the Arctic regions, ...
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Line 10, column 42, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...herefore, it is naive of us to attribute or assume global warming is the only iss...
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Line 10, column 151, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , which
...extinction. The argument has a few voids,which can be filled with the right evidence a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, regarding, so, then, therefore, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2165.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 433.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.723285838 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491916859122 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 671.4 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.4699966811 57.8364921388 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.947368421 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7894736842 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.36842105263 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160661140064 0.218282227539 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0594993193469 0.0743258471296 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0489890343212 0.0701772020484 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0762921865179 0.128457276422 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0587591401019 0.0628817314937 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 98.500998004 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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