As stated above in the argument, Monarch books have been in the business of books for more than twenty years. The myriad customer base is imputed to the wide variety of books available at Monarch books. The Board of Directors have a suggestion that opening a cafe would definitely attract more customers. This recommendation doesn't have any strong evidence to support it. For instance, the customers at Monarch books are not big fans of a cafe at a book store. Instead, they probably prefer quite places for their reading environment. The customers, who prefer the books available at the store need not be food lovers. Hence, opening a cafe could probably be a disastrous idea with more expenditure involved and less outcome.
Also, the suggestion for the venue of the cafe is the children's book section, given the recent national census that there is a decline in the population under the age of ten. It is a completely bizarre idea to discontinue the children's book section because of the decrease in the population nationwide. Probably, the number of children in and around Monarch books are still constant. That is, the nationwide decline in population doesn't implicitly or explicitly decide that the number of children who love reading books or are frequent customers of Monarch books are going to deteriorate. Discontinuing the children's book section is a extreme thing to say. Indeed, what if most of the customer base constitutes of children ? Answering this question is a determining factor whether the venue for the cafe is ideal or not.
Regarding the competition mentioned in the argument, the Regal Books, the customers might have different likings compared to the customers of the Monarch Books. Regal Books consists of a cafe but there is no mention of the fact that people visit the store because of the cafe. Maybe, the customers prefer the ambience or the locality in which it is situated compared to the cafe. Has the recent opening of the cafe been a useful aid to see a steady increase in the customer base of the customers? What if the answer to this question is a no? This would imply that the Monarch Books shouldn't open a cafe just to be on par with the methods used by it's competitors.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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flaws:
need introduction and conclusion paragraphs.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 382 350
No. of Characters: 1800 1500
No. of Different Words: 172 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.421 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.712 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.645 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 122 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.1 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.077 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.341 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.475 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.085 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 326, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...act more customers. This recommendation doesnt have any strong evidence to support it....
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Line 3, column 207, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... of ten. It is a completely bizarre idea to discontinue the childrens book sectio...
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Line 3, column 432, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...s, the nationwide decline in population doesnt implicitly or explicitly decide that th...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 635, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ontinuing the childrens book section is a extreme thing to say. Indeed, what if m...
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Line 3, column 701, Rule ID: CONSTITUTES_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'consists of'?
Suggestion: consists of
...deed, what if most of the customer base constitutes of children ? Answering this question is a...
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Line 5, column 583, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...This would imply that the Monarch Books shouldnt open a cafe just to be on par with the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, regarding, so, still, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1842.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 379.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86015831135 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69263384223 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.469656992084 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4256632821 57.8364921388 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.7142857143 119.503703932 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0476190476 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.90476190476 5.70786347227 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.372115597181 0.218282227539 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112531965491 0.0743258471296 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0954612227235 0.0701772020484 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256497043442 0.128457276422 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124695114695 0.0628817314937 198% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.3799401198 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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