"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town-Adams reality and Fitch Reality- Adams Reality is clearly superior. Adams' revenue last years was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168000,compared to Fitch"s $144000. homes listed with Adams sell faster as well:ten years ago i listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four month to sell; last year, When i sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Reality."
In the above claim, the author asserts that Adams Reality is better than Fitch Reality. Conspicuously, the above claim does not gives rigorous and sufficient explanation for Adam Reality to be superior. Also the statements the author has mentioned above can be belied.
Firstly, the author mentions that Adams Reality has more agent,so, it is consider superior. May be Adam Reality was established earlier than Fitch Reality so Adam has larger number of agents. Though Fitch Reality has less agent,it may provides better service to the people. There is no enough explanation about service provided.
Secondly,the author states that, many of the agents in the Fitch Reality only workpart time. There is no lucid data that shows agent in Adam do not do part time. Also, exact number of agent working part time is not mentioned. There might be case that Adams reality has more number of agent working part time as it has more number of agent. If author has give exact number of workers and part time worker in both firms then it could have been more pellucid.
Thirdly, Adam has more number than Fitch. Even though Fitch had 25 agent compared to Adam, which is 15 less than what Adam had, they managed to sale houses worth $144,000 which is only 24,000 less than Adams. Although author mention revenue of Adams last year to be twice as high Fitch, but the author has not mention about the current data so comparison
could be done between them.
Fourthly, the author compares between house sales of ten years ago in Fitch and One years ago in Adams. May be if he had listed his house last year in Fitch, it could have sold faster in Fitch than in Adam. i think it is irrelevant to compare between 10 years ago home sale with last year home sale to determine which one is superior.
The author has come to conclusion, based on his experience. Moreover their is no statistical data of both firms which can distinguish one of them to be better than other. If opinion of more number of local people about the firms was given than what ever the author conclude would have been relevant. So more authentic data is needed.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Firstly, the author mentions that Adams Reality has more agent,so, it is consider superior.
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to is and consider
Sentence: Though Fitch Reality has less agent,it may provides better service to the people.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to may and provides
Sentence: There is no lucid data that shows agent in Adam do not do part time.
Description: The fragment no lucid data is not usually preceded by is
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace is with are
Description: The word part is not usually used as a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to part
Sentence: If author has give exact number of workers and part time worker in both firms then it could have been more pellucid.
Description: A verb 'to have', present tense, 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to has and give
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 376 350
No. of Characters: 1695 1500
No. of Different Words: 160 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.403 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.508 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.102 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 99 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 63 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 34 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 16 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.905 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.154 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.366 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.568 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.19 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 129, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'give'
Suggestion: give
...Conspicuously, the above claim does not gives rigorous and sufficient explanation for...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 204, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...nation for Adam Reality to be superior. Also the statements the author has mentioned...
^^^^
Line 2, column 63, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , so
...ntions that Adams Reality has more agent,so, it is consider superior. May be Adam R...
^^^
Line 2, column 74, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'considered'.
Suggestion: considered
... Adams Reality has more agent,so, it is consider superior. May be Adam Reality was estab...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 227, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
...nts. Though Fitch Reality has less agent,it may provides better service to the peop...
^^^
Line 4, column 9, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...tion about service provided. Secondly,the author states that, many of the agents ...
^^^^
Line 4, column 152, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...data that shows agent in Adam do not do part time. Also, exact number of agent working pa...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 199, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...me. Also, exact number of agent working part time is not mentioned. There might be case t...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 299, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...eality has more number of agent working part time as it has more number of agent. If auth...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 388, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...or has give exact number of workers and part time worker in both firms then it could hav...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 407, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...umber of workers and part time worker in both firms then it could have been more ...
^^
Line 6, column 68, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'agent' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'agents'.
Suggestion: agents
...er than Fitch. Even though Fitch had 25 agent compared to Adam, which is 15 less than...
^^^^^
Line 6, column 309, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'mentioned'.
Suggestion: mentioned
...e as high Fitch, but the author has not mention about the current data so comparison ...
^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 353, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ion about the current data so comparison could be done between them. Fourthly,...
^^^
Line 9, column 208, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: I
...have sold faster in Fitch than in Adam. i think it is irrelevant to compare betwe...
^
Line 9, column 208, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...have sold faster in Fitch than in Adam. i think it is irrelevant to compare betwe...
^
Line 11, column 62, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...to conclusion, based on his experience. Moreover their is no statistical data of both fi...
^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 71, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...sion, based on his experience. Moreover their is no statistical data of both firms wh...
^^^^^
Line 11, column 173, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...sh one of them to be better than other. If opinion of more number of local people ...
^^^
Line 11, column 225, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of more number of local people about the firms was given than what ever the autho...
^^
Line 11, column 338, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...vant. So more authentic data is needed.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1752.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 373.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69705093834 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23761195446 2.78398813304 80% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.455764075067 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.3801375383 57.8364921388 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.6363636364 119.503703932 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9545454545 23.324526521 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.40909090909 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 21.0 5.25449101796 400% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335505029509 0.218282227539 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113910483828 0.0743258471296 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.09577126767 0.0701772020484 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169342136945 0.128457276422 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115148055395 0.0628817314937 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 14.3799401198 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 12.5979740519 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 12.3882235529 44% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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